TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Are parents today more embroiled in their progeny's education than were our mothers and fathers? Although some people may give a negative answer on the question, I am prone to buttress it because of the reasons which will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, role of parents in today's society has undergone significant changes since the time of our parents. Norms of appropriate parental behavior has altered enormously and deeds which used to be considered normal and healthy now may have dire consequences for parents. For instance, parents' attention to child's education used to be optional but now being deeply involved in offspring's education is not a respectful norm but a duty. A parent who does not demonstrate an interest to child's life, studying may easily lose his child because the social service may take the neglected child away. Thus parents have to be engulfed in offspring's life and education is one of the important aspects of offspring’s life.
Secondly, contemporary parents have modern technology which allows them being involved in children's education much more easily. In the past our predecessors did not have a constant contact with educators and school staff. In fact, the majority of parents saw teachers of their youngsters twice a year. Thus, the parents’ involvement was miniscule. However, today the school system has employed such new technology as the internet in general and social networks in particular. For instance, almost all schools are represented on the social web-sites such as Facebook. Additionally to it, many teachers created accounts for their classes as well. Thus today's father, who is subscribed to the child's class Facebook page, are well-informed about child's performance in school, about subjects taught as well as about pupil's homework.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may allow a person to state that our fathers and mothers were deeper involved in our education. Chiefly, the person may aver that parents used to help their children with homework and consequently they were closer to the progeny. However, I still affirm that helping one's child with homework does not equal being submerged in the child's education process. In fact, our fathers and mother were only occasionally involved in our studying but today's parents are involved constantly. They keep in touch with teachers via cell phones; they monitor children's marks online; this is another level of involvement.
To wrap up, contemporary parents are more involved in offspring's education because social prospect on the issue has changed dramatically, additionally to it, the advent of modern technology let the parents be submerged in students' performance constantly as a result they a way deeper involved in the process o education then our mothers and fathers used to be.
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Essay evaluation report
Firstly, role of parents in today's society has undergone
Firstly, the role of parents in today's society has undergone
Norms of appropriate parental behavior has altered enormously
Norms ... have altered enormously
as a result they a way deeper involved in the process o education then our mothers and fathers used to be.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2323 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.185 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.757 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.911 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.501 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 573, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
... the social web-sites such as Facebook. Additionally to it, many teachers created accounts f...
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Line 5, column 651, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ted accounts for their classes as well. Thus todays father, who is subscribed to the...
^^^^
Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...y. However, I still affirm that helping ones child with homework does not equal bein...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, well, for instance, in fact, in general, in particular, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31026785714 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83564649832 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515625 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0221425507 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.285714286 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239660714098 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854508810984 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621000916951 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152297766279 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241487625042 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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