TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Some people believe working continuously during a week gains more than working hard on some days a week. In my opinion, it is very helpful and dramatic to have a job just in three days a week for long hours. I have several reasons and describe it as following:

First, working just in three days a week brings you more time to have other plans like attending in gym and art classes. Workers have more efficiency when they are energetic and fresh. Having additional activities like exercise has remarkable effects on employee's performance. So if people have some days a week off, consequently have enough leisure time.

Moreover, people with financial problems can get the second job. Take me as an example, two years ago I worked in one company just in the first days of a week and in additional I worked in a restaurant for second three days of a week. By this way, I was able to afford my expenses during studying abroad and in additional saved a fair amount of money.

Finally, some jobs need extra knowledge to improve productivity. If employees have more time to focus on new technologies and products, they will raise the quality of products. Expert people get better results and they are vital elements of every company. The more time to study, the more gain.

To sum up, maybe working for long hours seems boring but advantages outweigh disadvantages. If all jobs follow this plan can bring country improvement. Every person sets specific schedule for daily life, although they are working, they have additional planes.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...like exercise has remarkable effects on employees performance. So if people have some day...
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Line 9, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... but advantages outweigh disadvantages. If all jobs follow this plan can bring cou...
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Line 9, column 261, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e working, they have additional planes.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'in addition', 'in my opinion', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252559726962 0.229887763892 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.150170648464 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.112627986348 0.0866891130778 130% => OK
Adverbs: 0.037542662116 0.046263068375 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0511945392491 0.0685040099705 75% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119453924915 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0307167235495 0.0351676179071 87% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60997767636 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0238907849829 0.0309702414327 77% => OK
Particles: 0.00682593856655 0.00188951952338 361% => OK
Determiners: 0.0853242320819 0.0887237588012 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0102389078498 0.0209618222197 49% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00341296928328 0.0139019557991 25% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1541.0 2387.08602151 65% => OK
No of words: 264.0 408.028673835 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.83712121212 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48200974243 90% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.325757575758 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.227272727273 0.251872472559 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.162878787879 0.174417080927 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0984848484848 0.112833075102 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60997767636 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.524397521467 113% => OK
Word variations: 61.8443873226 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5 20.5533526081 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4763943359 48.84282405 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3125 120.699889404 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.5533526081 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.644075263715 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 39.2272727273 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.68571428571 1.45489161554 116% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283292176807 0.300154397459 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.071959286745 0.103427244359 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.091157979187 0.0752933317313 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.489331401746 0.497263757937 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141298234455 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947599260146 0.114077575197 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790477055216 0.0781384742642 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.204645071935 0.336927656856 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0938750291996 0.067059652881 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168199161141 0.210909579961 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733988766279 0.0618886996521 119% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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