TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

There is no doubt that the working hour is a crucial factor for both the employers and employees. Whether working three days with longer hours is better than five days a week is still in a heat debate. Personally, I prefer the former one, especially when it can enhance the employees’ efficiency and give them more free time to control.

To begin with, working three days for longer hours can improve employees’ efficiency. The primary reason for this is that they can concentrate all their attention on their work with enough time to overcome difficulties. On the contrary, if they just have few hours, they may even not finish the preparation. And I can give you an example of my own experience. When I first memorize English words, I just cost no more than 30 minutes a day and most of the time are wasted on drinking coffee or looking for books. But after I tried to pay more time like one or two hours, it has a remarkable advance that I finished the whole book with three thousand words in just two months. In fact, it has the same impact on working. What’s more, this method can reduce the time wasted on transportation, especially for people who live far from the company.

Moreover, this method has four days for workers to enjoy themselves. Obviously, if they just have weekends, it is almost impossible to travel to other countries. With four days, however, the free time is doubled thus people can focus on their vacations and don’t need to worry about the trouble things. Most workers are dreaming of longer vacations according to a recent research by the Peking University. In fact, it also shows 80% of workers think it is reasonable to increase the working hours for longer free time. What’ more, after an exciting travel, people forget troubles with a better state to face the difficulties.

Admittedly, with the increase of working hours, some people may be tired of it. However, they can fully understand the advantages if they have the experience of four days free time to relax themselves. Then it is no doubt that all the workers will support this method and be addicted to both the working and the playing.

In a conclusion, after fully comparing the advantages and disadvantages, I insist on of working three days a week for long hours is better than the tradiontion.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r for both the employers and employees. Whether working three days with longer hours is...
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Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recent research'.
Suggestion: recent research
...eaming of longer vacations according to a recent research by the Peking University. In fact, it a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, then, thus, in fact, no doubt, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79850746269 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72295356678 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490049751244 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5200095389 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8571428571 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268630924375 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844089884597 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714983248779 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174853171351 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562353006352 0.0645574589148 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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