TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to

In such a modern life with advanved technologies, there might be something you can't imagine but nothing impossible. High technologies changes everything. Male could change to female with a transgender operation, robots are able to replace human in many positions, we can even feel everything though there's nothing since we have VR. Changes happen everyday, too fast to catch. As a result, some people proposed that people are less satisfied than before by claiming that this changing makes us confused. However, should a man stop eating just because of choking? I doubt about that. We tasted much more happiness from those changes rather than unsatisfactories.

To start with, all those changes make our life more colorful and improve our life qualities. Take Internet as an example, since it was brought to the world, millions of unbelievable resourses came out. We could not only esaily get information from it, which makes us more aware of the enormous magic world, but also change our life style with more thing done im Internet like listening to a lecture, shopping, and communication. It brings us alternatives of choices and lead to a more conventient life, the happiness we got is quite immearurable.

Further more, more changes results in unpredictable opportunities, which contributes to successes. To give an example, there is a very renowned dancer called Jin Xing, who used to be a man. He was really enormored with the beauty of woman's ductile body, and he changed his gendre by a denaturalization, which was impossible in the past. She evetually realized her dream of becoming a woman, and now he becomes more famous.

Change gave her the chance to achieve the life she wants, it also help ordinary people to obtain diversified possibilities. Blessed with plenty of changes, man can easily be stimulated to find one direction he most interested in to have a further development. For instance, as the Internet grew up, a intellectual from China, Ma Yun, came up with an idea of saling products in Internet. What he did created a sensation countrywide, because it was a completely new way for shopping. Everyone is attracted by this creativity. Before that, he was an mediocre teacher, it was the changes of Internet that makes him to be big banana from nobody.

It's couldn't be more satisfied with our lives when we have so considerable changes. All those things we couldn't imagine in old times, when slow transportation, letters made the day long and boring, become a reality. What kind of other happiness could compete this? I can't help thinking about how incredibly happy we will be to encounter more variations in the future!

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hnologies, there might be something you cant imagine but nothing impossible. High te...
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Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...ons, we can even feel everything though theres nothing since we have VR. Changes happe...
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Line 1, column 348, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...othing since we have VR. Changes happen everyday, too fast to catch. As a result, some p...
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Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
... to achieve the life she wants, it also help ordinary people to obtain diversified p...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... For instance, as the Internet grew up, a intellectual from China, Ma Yun, came u...
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Line 7, column 545, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...by this creativity. Before that, he was an mediocre teacher, it was the changes of...
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Line 9, column 5, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...m to be big banana from nobody. Its couldnt be more satisfied with our lives when w...
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Line 9, column 104, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...nsiderable changes. All those things we couldnt imagine in old times, when slow transpo...
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Line 9, column 267, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...f other happiness could compete this? I cant help thinking about how incredibly happ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, for instance, kind of, as a result, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02494331066 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93655083624 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600907029478 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6285955242 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2307692308 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9615384615 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26923076923 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165690426508 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044376659814 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443070960333 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0930194460349 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515612623773 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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