TPO 31
Do you agree or disagree whit the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that fast paced changing of the world has gained much prominence in recent decades. That being said, it should not be far-fetched to find some controversy and debate surrounding some of its aspects namely, changing the level of happiness and satisfaction. One popular opinion regarding this issue states that people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than the past. I personally repudiate this thesis. In what follows, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite reason coming mind is that in the communication-oriented age and day we observe recently, having access to the internet and social media, people have access to each other more convenient than before from all over the world. Take a girl who has to go abroad for continuing her education as an example. what can she and her family do provided that there is not access to the internet; they have to send a letter which takes so much time to reach that or by the telephone the just could speak together and hear their voice which is expensive too. But today by accessing the internet they can easily see and speak together wherever they are in any time. Moreover, accessing the social media, people can find friends easily from all over the world, whereas in the past people just could find friends and communicate with others in a very limited way. So people can get rid of depression or anxiety by developing their communication very easily these days and get happier than the past.
The other significant point which deserves some words is that in the modern day and age we live, by developing technology and industries people can do their task in a safer environment and situation with very well-developed machines and instruments. Some professions such as agriculture, construction, medicine, engineering, etc. exposed to hazardous and took a lot of energy from mankind to do that. Take a woman who is a doctor and by using the developed medical equipment she can easily do surgery and identify the disease as soon as possible. Furthermore, in her house, she can use dish machine, washing machine, microwave and other household appliances and does household chores very easily and in a convenient way. But in the past women had to do all their work by hand which was really hard and take so much energy and time and also some of them threatened their life seriously. So today people are really satisfied and can feel more relax and safe and also have more time to dependent it on being happy.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that access to the internet and social media and also developed technology has made people more and more satisfied in compared with the past. I personally predict that this feeling will get better and better in the future with this remarkable positive changing pace in all the aspects of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 321, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...continuing her education as an example. what can she and her family do provided that...
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Line 3, column 700, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a convenient way" with adverb for "convenient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...d does household chores very easily and in a convenient way. But in the past women had to do all th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, well, whereas, as to, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2430.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8310139165 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71475522516 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495029821074 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.9 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.9873172512 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.5 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.15 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21760574335 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640399567167 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914894300703 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142677431407 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622631742829 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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