TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

When it comes to children education, people in general believe that teacher plays an essential role in helping children learning. On the other hand, many people regard family matters, such as parents' education degree or children themselves' endeavors, as significant influence in education rather than school. Although teachers have beneficial impacts on education, personal hardworking is more important regardless of past or nowadays.
Certainly, students do spend more time on technology products, such as cell phones, online games, social networking web sites. However, technology is double-edged, it can be used to enhance the teaching quality. Teachers used to write every important point on the black board, or describe a certain circumstance verbally, left students abundant space for imagination. In contrast, nowadays, teachers prepare and demonstrate knowledge through projection of slides, with some pictures to help for explanations. For example, teacher used to describe the Seven Wonder through verbal words or only few insufficient photos of those sites. Today, more photos are exhibited, even videos on the Youtube are used for more clear understanding. Therefore, technology does help teachers improve teaching qualities, and students could consequently learn more effectively.
Moreover, even though technology is a huge distraction of children, it could help them learning as well. Students in the past went to library for searching related knowledge which teachers mentioned in class. In addition, the searching method in the library was also inefficient. However, with the advent of the invention of computers, current libraries are used computers for maintaining collections. Computers provide a more efficient way for students to search for related documents by entering key words of the title or the author of books, or a more advanced method which provided in the library is to search all the archives with similar themes. As a result, students nowadays do benefit more from the advanced technology.
Accordingly, though technology products, such as cell phones, online games, social networking web sites, distract children from studying, they in fact do help them learn effectively through more elaborate descriptions used for teachers, and through a more efficient approach to search for knowledge, compared to the past.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to learn' or 'learn'.
Suggestion: to learn; learn
...raction of children, it could help them learning as well. Students in the past went to l...
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Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: KEY_WORDS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'keywords'?
Suggestion: keywords
...earch for related documents by entering key words of the title or the author of books, or...
^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'consequently', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'in general', 'such as', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.279012345679 0.229887763892 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.153086419753 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.103703703704 0.0866891130778 120% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0567901234568 0.046263068375 123% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0172839506173 0.0685040099705 25% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.130864197531 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0444444444444 0.0351676179071 126% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9545659418 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0246913580247 0.0309702414327 80% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0641975308642 0.0887237588012 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00740740740741 0.0209618222197 35% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00740740740741 0.0139019557991 53% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2349.0 2387.08602151 98% => OK
No of words: 352.0 408.028673835 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.67329545455 5.86048508987 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.488636363636 0.338922669872 144% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.394886363636 0.251872472559 157% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.306818181818 0.174417080927 176% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.198863636364 0.112833075102 176% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9545659418 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553977272727 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 61.097474199 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7058823529 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7342221693 48.84282405 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.176470588 120.699889404 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 60.1945187166 45.7405998639 132% => OK
Elegance: 2.0 1.45489161554 137% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276657098697 0.300154397459 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126154423603 0.103427244359 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0865771379003 0.0752933317313 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.490569117118 0.497263757937 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.179684761899 0.151897553556 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105515959978 0.114077575197 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518315336149 0.0781384742642 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.277956751908 0.336927656856 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0968517232197 0.067059652881 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186731242407 0.210909579961 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205766904735 0.0618886996521 33% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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