TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

When it comes to children education, people in general believe that teacher plays an essential role in helping children learning. On the other hand, many people regard family matters, such as parents' education degree or children themselves' endeavors, as significant influence in education rather than school. Although teachers have beneficial impacts on education, personal hardworking is more important regardless of past or nowadays. As a result, technology could be a drawback for children, yet they could actually further them with for a more effective way of learning.
Certainly, students do spend more time on technology products, such as playing cell phone games, texting with friends, playing online or video games. However, technology is double-edged, it can be used to enhance the teaching quality. Teachers used to write every important summary on the black board, or describe a certain circumstance verbally, left students abundant space for imagination. In contrast, nowadays, teachers prepare and demonstrate new knowledge through projection of slides, with some pictures to help for explanations. For example, teachers used to describe the Seven Wonder through verbal words or only few insufficient photos of those sites. Today, more photos are exhibited, even videos on the Youtube are used for more clear understanding. Therefore, technology does help teachers improve teaching qualities, and students could consequently learn more effectively.
Moreover, even though technology is a distraction of children, it could help them learn as well. Students in the past went to library for searching related information which teachers mentioned in class. In addition, the searching method in the library was also inefficient. However, with the advent of the invention of computers, current libraries are equipped with computers for maintaining library collections. Computers provide a more efficient way for students to search for related documents by entering keywords of the title or the author of books, or a more advanced method which provided in most libraries is to search all the archives with similar themes related to searching topics. As a result, for students nowadays, benefits of using the advanced technology outweigh its marginal disadvantages.
Accordingly, though technology products, such as cell phones, online or video games, websites related to social networking, distract children from studying, they in fact do help them learn effectively through more elaborate descriptions used for teachers, and through a more efficient approach to search for knowledge, compared to the past.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'actually', 'also', 'consequently', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'in general', 'such as', 'as a result', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278396436526 0.229887763892 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.153674832962 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0935412026726 0.0866891130778 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0556792873051 0.046263068375 120% => OK
Pronouns: 0.022271714922 0.0685040099705 33% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135857461024 0.118717715034 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0489977728285 0.0351676179071 139% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.97518435375 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0267260579065 0.0309702414327 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0623608017817 0.0887237588012 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.011135857461 0.0209618222197 53% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00668151447661 0.0139019557991 48% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2613.0 2387.08602151 109% => OK
No of words: 392.0 408.028673835 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.66581632653 5.86048508987 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.487244897959 0.338922669872 144% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.405612244898 0.251872472559 161% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.313775510204 0.174417080927 180% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.196428571429 0.112833075102 174% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97518435375 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538265306122 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 60.5015168952 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.7777777778 20.5533526081 106% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6576215515 48.84282405 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.166666667 120.699889404 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 20.5533526081 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 62.3390022676 45.7405998639 136% => OK
Elegance: 2.0 1.45489161554 137% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25510516754 0.300154397459 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118598620224 0.103427244359 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0822388319501 0.0752933317313 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.48027635204 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16601186906 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968000568394 0.114077575197 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470512178636 0.0781384742642 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.289971024779 0.336927656856 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0563335146304 0.067059652881 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176725574372 0.210909579961 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127652071578 0.0618886996521 21% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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