As a matter of fact, technology has always had a big influence on human's life. During last decades companies presented many new technologies like smart phones and computers. These kinds of new instruments are attractive for people especially for school-age children. Parents have to manage the effect of these new things on their children's life, so they have to increase their knowledge about new technologies.
First of all, children cannot focus on their education, because of these new changes in technology. A child is tempting to play a game with his/her smart phone instead of studying some boring books. This factor is one of the most important causes for avoiding children of studying their school's books. Students are thinking about those games during their study time. They want to leave their books as soon as possible.
Second, these new apps and games are strongly attractive for all ages. It is not easy to turn them off. Also, actual books in schools are not attractive enough, so students are going to be around social Medias and smart phones for a long hours in a day. For instance, my sister-in-law have a child who really loves online games. She decided to change her boy's mind by turning off the modem, but her boy couldn't stand on his books. He told her that those books are really boring and there is nothing move and nothing is shiny or colorful.
Last but not least, children spend many hours in front of social media sites or online games, so they will be tired for their studying. As we all know, every person has limited ability to do their duties. If people waste their energy by some online games, they will be tired for the rest of their day. Additionally, this factor is more critical in student's life. They are not mature and they cannot decide correctly.
To sum up, new technologies are attractive for everybody, but children need to be aware of some harmful effects on their life and their parents should help them in this way.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Some content are duplicated, like in the third and fourth paragraph, they are all about online games.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1584 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.605 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.343 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.418 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.272 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...ology has always had a big influence on humans life. During last decades companies pre...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'hour'?
Suggestion: hour
...cial Medias and smart phones for a long hours in a day. For instance, my sister-in-la...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...d by turning off the modem, but her boy couldnt stand on his books. He told her that th...
^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'for instance', 'as a matter of fact', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236220472441 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.141732283465 0.158761421928 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.110236220472 0.0866891130778 127% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0551181102362 0.046263068375 119% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0761154855643 0.0685040099705 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128608923885 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0262467191601 0.0351676179071 75% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.40474100824 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0262467191601 0.0309702414327 85% => OK
Particles: 0.00787401574803 0.00188951952338 417% => OK
Determiners: 0.0682414698163 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0131233595801 0.0209618222197 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00262467191601 0.0139019557991 19% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1965.0 2387.08602151 82% => OK
No of words: 342.0 408.028673835 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.74561403509 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.315789473684 0.338922669872 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.190058479532 0.251872472559 75% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.12865497076 0.174417080927 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0847953216374 0.112833075102 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40474100824 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546783625731 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 59.2632738029 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.2857142857 20.5533526081 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6801386696 48.84282405 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5714285714 120.699889404 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2857142857 20.5533526081 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52380952381 0.644075263715 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 35.2915622389 45.7405998639 77% => OK
Elegance: 1.43269230769 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167871213011 0.300154397459 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0540334776769 0.103427244359 52% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0564428999077 0.0752933317313 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.453204718567 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.173254877096 0.151897553556 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596888629481 0.114077575197 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306802874888 0.0781384742642 39% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.248300893499 0.336927656856 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0387069925404 0.067059652881 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105470340563 0.210909579961 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439960848755 0.0618886996521 71% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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