TPO 34
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on the cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that children education has gained much prominence in recent decades. That being said, it should not be far-fetched to find some controversy and debate surrounding that namely, the difficulty of educating children today. One popular opinion regarding this issue states that children’s education task is more difficult today than in the past. I personally repudiate this idea. In what follows, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point coming to mind is that in the modern day and age we observe cell phone plays a crucial role in accessing to the firsthand information in children. In the past, accessing only to the material which teachers taught to students in school, children had to just learn the courses by using them. However, today there are far wider ranges of information and education materials on the internet that children can access to them far simpler and easily by their cellphones. In this way, they can prepare themselves for the lessons which their teachers going to teach them. That is to say, the advent of cellphone paves the way for children’s education.
Another significant reason, one should take into account is that social networks benefit children in their life abundantly. They can triumph over challenges and obstacles whoever may encounter in their life. For instance, take a student who wants to continue education abroad. If he joins to the groups of students of his country educating in that university or living in that city, he can far easily find information, such as life costs at that country, better quality campus dorm and particularly finding friends far simply. As a result, having this knowledge in hand, he can make the best decision at a short time. With this in mind, children can have a good grasp of information and experience they need if they joining to the specific social networks with the considerable number of children from all over the world.
The third interesting point which deserves some words here is that online games broaden children’s horizon. Online games enable children to enhance their practical and academic skills. Group online games benefit them to learn decision making and better interacting with wide arrays of members who may not have a chance to interact with them and use their skills in the actual world. Moreover, online games are thought-provoking. For instance, there are a plethora of English vocab quiz games which corporate children learn numerous English words along with having fun. According to the refreshingly intelligible statistics released by a recent research conducted at the University of Tehran, 78% of the children who play useful online games are more efficacious and prosperous in their future lives.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that educating children are far easier and convenient today in compare with the past due to telecommunication devices, social network, and online games. However some may believe that these facilities have made children addictive and less active than the past, I personally believe that by effective control of families, children can strike a balance between their education and using these facilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to decision'
Suggestion: to decision
...roup online games benefit them to learn decision making and better interacting with wide...
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Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ices, social network, and online games. However some may believe that these facilities ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, third, for instance, such as, as a result, by and large, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2760.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21739130435 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82981653241 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52741020794 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 852.3 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9608034268 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0416666667 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04166666667 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235375813188 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652499767686 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590998797733 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136947131537 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453846123821 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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