Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's competitive academic world, education is of pivotal importance in children's success, and a good education can guarantee their professional lives. Parents, as the closest people living around children, play an important role in children's learning process. They are able to facilitate children's education by employing different means and methods. With this in mind, some people believe that parents should offer monetary rewards to their children for their high grades; however, others hold the opposite side, stating that financial rewards have some noticeable disadvantages. I, personally, agree with the former group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, monetary rewards can encourage children to exert themselves to their study materials, culminating in higher performance in their academic affairs. To be more specific, children need something incentive to become motivated in order to dedicate their time and energy to studying. Psychologically speaking, money acts as effective stimulus to make children enthusiastic about their course materials. As a result, children make a great attempt to receive high grades to earn more money from their parents to spend it on their favorite things. Only if school-age children know they are capable of receiving a phenomenal gift for their high grades do they try to ace their exams. My own experience is compelling evidence to illustrate this. Being an elementary school, I was rewarded with a monetary gift for every top score I gave. Therefore, Not only did I prioritize my activities in favor of my assignments and homework, but I also limited my leisure time so that I could gain remarkable scores at the end of semesters. Ultimately, finishing elementary school to the best of my ability, I was admired by parents and teachers. In addition, I won a full scholarship to attend one of the most prestigious secondary schools in my country. Had my parents not offered me monetary rewards for my excellent scores, I would not have succeeded in my studies.
Secondly, by receiving money for their high grades, children learn to manage their money since they have tried to earn it. To elucidate, nowadays, most children take their budget for granted, and they are entirely dependent on their parents, causing them to spend their money on frivolous things, such as comic books and video games, both of which may have deleterious repercussions on their academic progress. By contrast, if they make money through gaining high grades, they try to neither spend their money extravagantly nor waste it on unnecessary activities. Accordingly, they will learn how to manage their budget from an early age, which is an immense asset to their adulthood. The aforementioned explanation substantiates how efficacious monetary rewards are in developing essential personality traits in children.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that it is highly beneficial for children to be given money for their phenomenal performance in their exams. This is because they will be more stimulated to improve their grades to achieve rewards again and again, leading to a significant rise in their academic progress. Besides, they will learn how to manage their budget and spend it thriftily.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...an important role in childrens learning process. They are able to facilitate childrens ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2765.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2969348659 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9344413376 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524904214559 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5410458621 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.208333333 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301527982084 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949991007995 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066184444843 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197345690715 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219735136592 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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