A glance at today's parents way of rewarding their children on study brings to light a question that has several times provoked debate, namely, whether it is advisable for parents to offer school-age children money for high grade. Some might contend that by doing so the students can be motivated to study harder, and make progress continually. However, I would like to asserts that parents are not supposed to provide financial awards for children's study.
First and foremost, getting money from good grades distorts the real goal of study. It is widely accepted that children go to school to satisfy the instinctive curiosity of understanding the world, and to be equipped with essential knowledge for getting a job when they grow up. But if parents use money to reward children for their success in study, it is likely to make children believe that they study hard so they can use the money to buy things they want. Were they had formed this thought, it would be difficult for them to figure out the aim of learning as soon as the financial reward stops.
Secondly, it is undeniable that students need to learn every subject as hard as possible, regardless of how they had performed in the previous tests, because they are faced with new knowledge from time to time. As one can imagine, if the students study only to get money from their parents, they will naturally spend more time and energy on those subjects that they can make progress easily, and ignore those they already do well or do not seem to have the ability to do better. This can eventually lead to unbalanced development of the student.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by those who argue that offering school-age children money for high marks is reasonable. For example, children can learn that it is only hard work that brings about fortune, which can be a worthy notion when they commence their careers. Nonetheless, I still affirm that students can also get this notion by taking a part-time job.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I firmly believe that it is unwise for parents to offer their children money for high grades they get at school, and the real purpose of getting knowledge and balanced development of the student are two prime and conspicuous reasons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 370, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'assert'.
Suggestion: assert
...s continually. However, I would like to asserts that parents are not supposed to provid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86753246753 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55705810047 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511688311688 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.8996742351 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.857142857 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328718765016 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125075291687 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869747093596 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21238651313 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555658162121 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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