TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Without no doubt, some people would think that busy parents should spend time with their children having fun, while others may consider the other point of view, and believe they are helping them better by doing things related with their homework. As far as I am concern, I am convinced, as a parent that I am, that having fun with children by playing games or sport, is the best way to share time with them when parents are too busy.

First of all, I consider that a positive memory in childhood is always associated with enjoyment and quality time shared with parents. Moreover, the opportunity from parents to demonstrate affection and built confident to their children is more probable produced by sharing and supporting fun moments together. For instants, I remember waiting with excitement the vacations time when my parents decided to spend time together, by the beach. Those memories still feeling my heart with love and gratification.

On the other hand, parents would believe that using the spare time supporting the children's schoolwork may be important and priority over playing games. According to researches from the University of Toronto, children have a better performance at school when they have more quality time sharing fun activities with parents than being helped by them in their homerworks. This does not mean parents should not help their children with homework, but they may consider that, in case they have to choose, a fun and relaxed activity to share with them are preferred. Hence, their confident are higher, and they are more relaxed, and open to learn.

Finally, the fact that an activity, like games or sport, are not traditionally academic, does not meant that they could not teach something to the children in a positive and creative way. For example, sport are important to teach team work, discipline and motion skills. Parents teaching how to kick a ball also strength the bond and confident of their children. Who can not remember the day our father or mother teach us to ride a bicycle?

In summary, considering all the reasons exposed above, I, indeed, believe that the best way to spend time with kids when parents are busy, and have not too much time left, is by sharing a positive moment and having fun with their children.

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Average: 7.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...re not traditionally academic, does not meant that they could not teach something to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, in summary, no doubt, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94010416667 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48696553225 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510416666667 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1461466764 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.466666667 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.13333333333 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417388244998 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137214506479 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118754780954 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255700714953 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131466291655 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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