TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

Celebrities are highly influential people. They have a very huge fan following, mainly of younger generation. I personally believe that opinions of famous celebrities really matters to young people than that of adults. Young generation follow these celebrities and imitate them while older generation believe in themselves and their knowledge for their decisions.

First of all, Youth considers these celebrities as their idols. They always try to imitate them. They want to become famous and rich like these celebrities. Thus, for this reason today's youth pays too much attention to opinions expressed by the celebrities. For example, many girls and boys vote a particular member of a political party during elections that their favorite celebrity is endorsing. They do not try to investigate the background of that political leader. By doing so younger people believes that they are like one of the celebrities.

Second, youth are blinded by the success and fame of these celebrities. Many people want to reach such epitome of success that of their beloved celebrities. They forget the hard work behind their success. They are mesmerized by their charm and follow the opinions of these celebrities blindly. For instance, many people follow particular diet or lifestyle as similar to the famous people; even if, it's not suitable for them.

Finally, if we consider the older generation; they are very mature and think rationally. They always knew that blindly following opinions of celebrities is harmful. to illustrate this, many adults know the harmful effects of drinking sodas or other aerated drinks. Although, many celebrities are seen promoting these products in advertisements older people knows the harmful effects of drinking coke and try to avoid these drinks.

To conclude, young people are in complete awe of celebrities and follow their opinion blindly than their parents who are more practical.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, really, second, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39202657807 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74907257611 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521594684385 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2405404557 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.2857142857 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3333333333 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203705188003 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712094335335 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467190416251 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126134669817 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233675069267 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.39 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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