Celebrities have always played a very big role in our lives as we tend to follow them more closely. But it is always the youngsters who admire celebrities more than older people. In my opinion, I believe that the opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. I would like to support my argument with the following reasons.
Firstly, young people are more passionate towards entertainment and sports than older people. Due to this it is obvious that youngsters feel connected with their favourite celebrities than older people. This love for their celebrities influences their way of living and the value the opinion of the celebrities. An incident which took place in India some years ago will support my point. In Tamil Nadu, a state in India, Rajnikanth is a well known film personality who has over a million fans, most of them youngsters. His fans are crazy for him and religiously follow his films, speeches and opinions. Rajnikanth supported a political party in public for the state elections in 1996. His fans, most of them youngsters, valued his opinion so much that they also supported the same political party. It turned out that the political party gained a landslide victory in the elections and it was believed that young fans has made a vital contribution in the electoral victory.
Secondly, in most cases, young people emulate celebrities more often than older people. This plays a major role in opinions of such celebrities being more important to youngsters. My own experience will help support my viewpoint. My friend is a huge fan of Sachin Tendulkar, a legendary cricket player in India. I had recently gone shopping with him in a cloth store and he had bought a T-shirt of a particular brand and insisted me to buy shirts from the same brand. When I asked him for the reason, he said that the brand was advertised by Sachin and hence he wants to buy clothes from the same brand. My friend uses accessories worn by Sachin and he find this cool. Youngsters value the opinion of the celebrities and try to emulate them as they think it is cool and gains attention from their peers. This incident proves that sometimes, youngsters do not just value the opinions of the celebrities but also are swayed by them. Older people are more mature and experienced and value the opinions of each individual equally.
In conclusion, I believe that younger people value the opinions of the celebrities more than older people because youngsters are usually passionate about celebrities and feel more connected with them and try to emulate them and hence value their opinions highly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, such as, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9032967033 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68209680657 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454945054945 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9860317827 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9583333333 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9583333333 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237001667473 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782482879159 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974498493859 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181524411271 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780538170388 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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