TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

Everyone of us like the entertainer and athletes regardless of age, race, ethnicity, gender and nationality because they are one in million people and their works are really amazing and there is no doubt in that. Among us, the younger generations gives more important for the these people little more than the older people. There are several reasons why youngster likes them more.

First of all, earlier technological advancement less when compare with today's level. Because of these technological advancement all the events easily spread to people everywhere in the corner of the world that is incredible. So, younger people easily attracted by actors and sports person. For example, Earlier also there was fans for actors Rajini but his fans more than billions people in the world because technology spreads his popularity even though he is old now. Fans are putting the actor picture on the international flight. This happens first time in the world history, it shows younger people are more interest towards the entertainers.

Secondly, youngster are taking the sports man as role model which is not happens much in the past. For example, Dhoni is Indian team captain who is from Nagpur and all of the youngster following is hair style till today even at college, office, party areas and play grounds which could be evidenced that the younger generation gives more important for the sports persons. And, they are taking matter as their prestige symbol.

Thirdly, even some of us building the temple for the actress it's happening in Chennai. People started building the temple for the actress Kushpu who very famous south Indian actress. But, earlier people never did activity that much level while compare with new generation. It is a big proof that confirm, younger are would be influenced by the entertainer and athletes.

Finally, the younger generation following their advertisements of the actors or sportsperson. For example, If, Schachin wears Nike shoe for ad then all of youngster thinks that they should buy more Nike shoes, earlier it was not like that. These all events evidence that young generation gives more important to the entertainers and athletes than earlier people.

To sum up, the young generation are gives more important to actor and sports person because of the technological advancement, advertisements, influenced by the actors or athletes way of life style like dressing sense, hair style,gesture and facial expression. These activities must be examined more carefully in order to reduce negative impact and positive events should be encouraged very well.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
...and nationality because they are one in million people and their works are really amazi...
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Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re important for the these people little more than the older people. There are se...
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Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nt less when compare with todays level. Because of these technological advancement all ...
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Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lso there was fans for actors Rajini but his fans more than billions people in th...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ian team captain who is from Nagpur and all of the youngster following is hair style till ...
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Line 9, column 132, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Nike) must be used with a third-person verb: 'shoes'.
Suggestion: shoes
...n. For example, If, Schachin wears Nike shoe for ad then all of youngster thinks tha...
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Line 11, column 229, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , gesture
...fe style like dressing sense, hair style,gesture and facial expression. These activities...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'well', 'while', 'even so', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'first of all', 'to sum up']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.280172413793 0.229887763892 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.120689655172 0.158761421928 76% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0905172413793 0.0866891130778 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0689655172414 0.046263068375 149% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0366379310345 0.0685040099705 53% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122844827586 0.118717715034 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0301724137931 0.0351676179071 86% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66331112312 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.010775862069 0.0309702414327 35% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00215517241379 0.00188951952338 114% => OK
Determiners: 0.0905172413793 0.0887237588012 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.010775862069 0.0209618222197 51% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0172413793103 0.0139019557991 124% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2600.0 2387.08602151 109% => OK
No of words: 417.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.23501199041 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390887290168 0.338922669872 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.273381294964 0.251872472559 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.182254196643 0.174417080927 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117505995204 0.112833075102 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66331112312 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517985611511 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 58.2969899452 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8571428571 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3697225549 48.84282405 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.80952381 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.904761904762 0.644075263715 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 47.1952723535 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.91428571429 1.45489161554 132% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403847791249 0.300154397459 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113072568544 0.103427244359 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0969389341852 0.0752933317313 129% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.512903099524 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155524980874 0.151897553556 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152239605669 0.114077575197 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747070306251 0.0781384742642 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.313174205081 0.336927656856 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0433437453538 0.067059652881 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258842685175 0.210909579961 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528591344509 0.0618886996521 85% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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