People used to live in a relatively separate world, there is no connections among places except for concrete path. Nevertheless, advanced technology closely connect the place to place through internet these days, modern citizens know about current things through this media. People relish it because they can broaden their horizons it promotes people developing their own outlook and provide a more objective point of view.
Firstly, people are able to expand their knowledge range through knowing current events, because events happen nearby is limited in variety. For example, inhabitants in Boston will probably never experience an earthquake. Unlike them, on the western coast, Californians live on the Pacific rim which is an area where earthquake will frequently occur, so they are possibly victims of earthquake. Citizens in Boston can know exactly about what had happened on the other side US, through coverage on different media, so those reports can be really informative to them.
Meanwhile, people form personal world view through knowing about news around the world, because events happen in communities where we live in are limited in varieties, people need experience to form their own outlook, peoples brain will analyze everything that is experienced and gradually form a mature outlook, which might account for why experienced means sophisticated. For example if a person have live in many different country, that person might experience societies under different types of Authority. Actually different Parties embody both advantages and drawbacks. A country which is governed by only on Party is more stable at the same time this type of country is relatively less democratic than a country with a number of Parties.
Admittedly, if a person does not know what is happening around the world will make a person more concentrated on their own things. They can be disturbed and distracted by what others do instead of persisting his own. However, this will not result badly, because sometimes people stand too close to what they are doing, they could not detect what they did are incorrect. If there is viewer aside and proposes a completely different point of view, the viewer might be more objective because he stands on a objective angle, situations will change possibly. Knowing what occur around the world serves a similar function as that person which can give people a more objective point.
In conclusion, knowing global events serves many merits include broadening their horizons promoting people developing their own outlook and providing a more objective point of view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...izens know about current things through this media. People relish it because they ca...
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...provide a more objective point of view. Firstly, people are able to expand their...
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...orts can be really informative to them. Meanwhile, people form personal world vi...
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...han a country with a number of Parties. Admittedly, if a person does not know wh...
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...oviding a more objective point of view.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, look, nevertheless, really, so, while, except for, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2199.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33737864078 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6510043857 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53640776699 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.242640015 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.352941176 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2352941176 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146138458348 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508313170397 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355880077688 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831526544113 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348471911564 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.