TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Knowing how to manage your time is an important part of our lives. Because every thing in our lives depend on time.  Some people believe that all people not only the youngest should put plan to organize their lives, while other disagree with this point, they believe it is not necessary to put the plan because sometimes the life will bring many new things we do not know a bout it. In my opinion, I believe we should make more efforts to organize our life for two important reasons will be explained below.

The main reason is that by organizing their life they may have more chances to succeed in global society. If they know how to take the advantage from every chance they encounter, that will help them to get experience in a variety of subject. For instance my sister she is a dentist now, when she was a student she put a plan to take a variety of courses in English, biology and many different subjects. She thought that maybe help her to be a successful dentist in a short time. After she graduated , she traveled to USA to start her career there. But as we know  English was not the first language in our country, so she encountered some difficulties. But because she already took some courses in English, that helped her a lot to start her career in USA. This experience taught me that organizing your time is so important factor to realize your dreams and to be a successful person.

The other reason is that if  people start to organize their lives when they are in a young age, that will help them to be more responsibility and mature. For instance when I was  in Syria, my parent's let me work a part time job alongside with studying in my university. While my friends her parent's refutes that . She always depend on her parent's even after we graduated, but because my parent's give me this option I  had been more able to build my self very fast and to be more responsibility. As you can see depending on your self even when you are in a young age, can make your life more easy because you will learn a lot of lessons that help you in facing this life.

To summarize, todays  many young people are more mature than older people, and that because they took advantage of every opportunity in their life. They tried to be more responsibility and work so hard , and as a result they been very successful in their career.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, while, for instance, of course, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4662004662 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41614777316 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449883449883 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6988548062 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.444444444 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133235974887 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409835507666 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475777266572 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0915024565766 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368679159117 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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