TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Over the past few decades, life has changed and full of obstacles and difficulties from birth to death. I am in favor of the opinion that having plan and organizing viewed as an important thing for youngsters since life is really complicated. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following paragraph.
To begin with, capability of organizing allows adolescents to manage their work. The emergence of technology affects our life. Despite the benefits of advanced technology, it creates many problem since people tend to use it a lot. If we do not use these facilities such as computer and iPad properly, it take our time. So young people should be on schedule in order to catching up their work on time. My experiences demonstrates this concept. As a doctor who has hectic life, I work with my laptop a lot and if I entertain myself with unimportant things I cannot conduct my work on time.
Moreover, having the ability to plan offers young adult a chance to prove themselves. These days people are competing with each other for everything. All of them try their best so that they achieve their goal. If they want to overcome the other people, they should be able to organize. Let me illustrates with one of my experiences. When I was a sophomore, a great opportunity was given us. Our teacher asked all student to solve a difficult mathematics question. There was a great competition between students. I was really busy since I worked part-time However, I made a perfect effort to find the answer and finally I was successful.
In conclusion, the complexity of life is increased and young people should have plan. Since the advent of technology and competition have influence on our life. So being organize is very important.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 183, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'many problems'.
Suggestion: many problems
...fits of advanced technology, it creates many problem since people tend to use it a lot. If w...
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Line 2, column 304, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
Suggestion: takes
... such as computer and iPad properly, it take our time. So young people should be on ...
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Line 4, column 81, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
... increased and young people should have plan. Since the advent of technology and com...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, moreover, really, so, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78289473684 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80679823705 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601973684211 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2707509214 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.0909090909 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8181818182 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04545454545 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19920692568 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545061580505 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607287220944 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13194514206 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530828469163 0.0645574589148 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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