TPO18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that teachers play an important role in successful people lives. In this regards, many individuals believe that educators motivate their students to achieve their goals, others believe otherwise and claim that students are more influenced by their friends. In my opinion, I support the the first group for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, teacher makes our ways easy and motivates us to retain our dreams. Many students fail to achieve their goals due to lack of motivations from their parents and teachers. Educators are more experience than students. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. Three years ago, when I was in university my parents lost his job. I felt hopeless because I had dream to study in abroad after my postgraduate. I couldn't concentrate on my study and even during class I seat on the last bench silently. Evidently, One of my teachers noticed me and he personally asked me about my problem. I still remember that day how he motivate me. Actually, my teacher also faced some problems in his student life. However, he had helped me financially and he still encourages what I am doing to go abroad. If he had not asked and told his life story, I would not able to retain my dream.
Furthermore, students like to hear advices from an experienced person. Every teacher tries to perform well in front of their students in order to get satisfaction from core of his heart. Many students fully follow their teacher's teaching style, friendliness and kindliness, and they decides to be a teacher in future. For example, In my high school a teacher teaches physics very effectively. Everyone in our class appreciated his teaching methods and we never felt sleepy during his class. Once we asked him how he learned to teach so. As a result, he replied he imitates one of his physics teachers. After that we all started to teach our juniors in the same approach.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that students are more influenced by their teachers than their friends. This is because educators motivates students unconditionally and students are interested to receive motivation from a experienced teacher.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ant role in successful people lives. In this regards, many individuals believe that ...
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...their friends. In my opinion, I support the the first group for two main reasons, which...
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...tudy in abroad after my postgraduate. I couldnt concentrate on my study and even during...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'decide'
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..., friendliness and kindliness, and they decides to be a teacher in future. For example,...
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...iness, and they decides to be a teacher in future. For example, In my high school a teach...
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...e imitates one of his physics teachers. After that we all started to teach our junior...
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...e interested to receive motivation from a experienced teacher.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96505376344 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79175046856 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556451612903 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1129506586 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.88 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.88 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211697624434 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613052802464 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838443210804 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169087534344 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712942705486 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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