What are some of the experiences that shaped your outlook and the way you live now?
As the old adage goes "Experience is a better teacher than a book", my life's experience has also shaped my outlook. There have been many unforgettable experience which have impacted my life in both positive and sometimes in a negative way.
First, the terrorist attack on the Indian parliament had a profound effect on my life. All my life, I had wanted to become a engineer, but when I saw the the horrific images of the cowardly attack on the center of Indian democracy. I decided to try my luck in armed forces. I was motivated by the incident and decided to fight for protecting the freedom of the largest democracy in the world. I joined the armed course to get involved in the core of anti-terrorist operation.
Another experience which shaped my outlook was while I was patoralling near the border. There was shelling at our base and one of my compatirot was gravely injured. My compatriot was in great pain and I couldn't help him beyond the basic medical procedure. Fortunately, reinfrocements arrived in time and my friend was saved. The inablity to help a fellow soldier at the time of grave medical danger prompted me to become a medic for my battalion. I immediately informed my supervisor about my wishes and he helped me securing a place in the medical department. The shelling incident was the impetus behind my decision to pursue a medical trianing and become a medic.
Lastly, becoming a father to a girl has shaped my outlook completely. The fatherhood has taught me to look at life with hope. The way a child look at the world, the inquisitiveness and the curiosity is responsible for me to seek out more knowledge. This has renewed my vigor of working towards my masters degree in internal medicine.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much unforgettable experience', 'a good deal of unforgettable experience'.
Suggestion: much unforgettable experience; a good deal of unforgettable experience
...also shaped my outlook. There have been many unforgettable experience which have impacted my life in both pos...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... my life in both positive and sometimes in a negative way. First, the terrorist attack on the...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...fe. All my life, I had wanted to become a engineer, but when I saw the the horrif...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ed to become a engineer, but when I saw the the horrific images of the cowardly attack ...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ed to become a engineer, but when I saw the the horrific images of the cowardly attack ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... of the largest democracy in the world. I joined the armed course to get involved...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
.... My compatriot was in great pain and I couldnt help him beyond the basic medical proce...
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to secure' or 'secure'.
Suggestion: to secure; secure
...rvisor about my wishes and he helped me securing a place in the medical department. The ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'lastly', 'look', 'so', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21686746988 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.174698795181 0.158761421928 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0933734939759 0.0866891130778 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0210843373494 0.046263068375 46% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0963855421687 0.0685040099705 141% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.105421686747 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0512048192771 0.0351676179071 146% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9448224629 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0301204819277 0.0309702414327 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00301204819277 0.00188951952338 159% => OK
Determiners: 0.126506024096 0.0887237588012 143% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0209618222197 0% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00903614457831 0.0139019557991 65% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1741.0 2387.08602151 73% => OK
No of words: 301.0 408.028673835 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78405315615 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48200974243 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36877076412 0.338922669872 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.259136212625 0.251872472559 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.179401993355 0.174417080927 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109634551495 0.112833075102 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9448224629 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554817275748 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 58.0949045994 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.7222222222 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0059435616 48.84282405 55% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7222222222 120.699889404 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7222222222 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.644075263715 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 42.6358434847 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.27835051546 1.45489161554 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285297617262 0.300154397459 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.124474514565 0.103427244359 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0917623117681 0.0752933317313 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.549928510152 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.124953644408 0.151897553556 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11996019795 0.114077575197 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764072036615 0.0781384742642 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.310073431065 0.336927656856 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.111466053854 0.067059652881 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199015658463 0.210909579961 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599626433575 0.0618886996521 97% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.