“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

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“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

A famous saying that success always comes after hard working. Some people believe that people succeed because of hard work, others would disagree. In my opinion, hard work always give success because it makes people confident and responsible so that they can achieve their goal easily and efficiently.
First, because of hard work, people are confident. They think positive and they assure themselves that they will achieve their target. However, if by any chance people didn’t succeed but their hard work never waste and they may utilize it somewhere else in future. For instance, my sister had star exam in high school and she thought that she didn’t need any practice as she always got good marks in class. she was very confident that she will make in this exam very well. After her exam, she realized that she need more improvement. When she got her result, she didn’t pass. And she thought that she need to work hard and also be confident. So, that prove that although you know everything, but you need to work hard so that you can achieve your goal positively and passively.
Second, the person becomes responsible due to hard working. They learn how to handle and cope with the difficult situation. The hard worker can easily achieve their goal and secure their future. Nowadays, unemployment crisis affecting not only poor countries but also affecting eastern countries as well. So, to avoid that period a person should be responsible and hard worker so that they can succeed in future. For instance, my uncle when he moved to United State and he had a problem in finding a good and secure job which should be related to their field. When he saw that he could not get the job easily on the basis of bachelor degree than he decided to do master in his field. Today, he is doing a good and secure job this is all because he did struggle and hard work in master degree.
In conclusion, a person should do hard work so that he become a responsible citizen and he will be confidently believed that he will achieve his goals. Although some people think that luck is as important than hard work but luck never stays together with the person. while, hardworking always stay with them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... and they may utilize it somewhere else in future. For instance, my sister had star exam ...
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Line 2, column 417, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: She
... as she always got good marks in class. she was very confident that she will make i...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...nd hard worker so that they can succeed in future. For instance, my uncle when he moved t...
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Line 3, column 560, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...which should be related to their field. When he saw that he could not get the job ea...
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Line 4, column 206, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as important 'as'".
Suggestion: as
... people think that luck is as important than hard work but luck never stays together...
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Suggestion: While
...k never stays together with the person. while, hardworking always stay with them. ...
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Message: “while” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...k never stays together with the person. while, hardworking always stay with them. ...
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Suggestion:
...e, hardworking always stay with them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, you know, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74739583333 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36686374757 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453125 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9027742155 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2608695652 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6956521739 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91304347826 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221813569572 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729767194625 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057902405579 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147667191488 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315251530458 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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