Which is a better way of learning about life: personal experience or listening to the advice of family and friends. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life.
Learning about life and how to have a better life is an issue that all of people are trying to find a logical and practical solution about it. There are two common and possible way to learn about life. First, we can just behave and make decision based on our own experiences and get other people’s recommendations and ask them to tell us about their experiences. Both of these strategies have their own advantage and disadvantages which we will argue them in following paragraphs.
Learning about life based on our own personal experience is easier way to follow, because all of us have our own life story which consist of a lot of experiences.
These experiences shape our perspective toward life and able us to judge life and reaction to the events based on this perspective. Consequently, our perspective toward life shapes our interesting too. Based on our perspective, which is result of our personal experience, we can talk about our favorite thing such as hobbies, job, person, etc. For instance, I used to play soccer when I was child because all of my friends liked it. But, I was really passionate to play basketball too, but because none my friends didn’t eager to do that, I haven’t any experience about it. So, I don’t know anything about it, but I think life is like playing soccer; mixture of good strategies and mental and physical abilities. Therefore, my own personal experience able me to adapt myself with what I have to do in future with considering what I have learned in past.
In contrast, pay attention to others' experience and suggestions are really important too. There is couple of reasons to support the claim. First, other peoples’ cumulative experience is much more that our own experience. All of people faced with different situation that we didn’t experienced them. Furthermore, by using others’ experiences, we have more data to analysis, so, we can broaden our knowledge about wide variety of issue which we didn’t encountered them. Also, these suggestions will be more valuable if we will be in the similar condition. To illustrate, I usually use others comments on social communities about security, price, tidiness and other important factors of a hotel when I decide to travel and reserve a specific hotel. So, others' experiences and advice can shed light our knowledge on about wide variety of issues and help us to make right decision in right times.
In conclusion, we should consider both our own experience and others' recommendation in learning about life. Just following our experience makes us an one dimensional person and limits our perspective about life, like a person who spend all of his life in a cave. On contrary, by paying too much attention to others' advice, we will unable to make even a decision because we will be very sensible and consequently, we will confused and will miss our own way of living. in conclusion, both of these strategies are correct, if and even if use in right time and in the right way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2512.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93516699411 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92549356327 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461689587426 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.9 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3823424167 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.666666667 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2083333333 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306928773373 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107211119128 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110910481478 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227740665684 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922190049399 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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