Why are people attracted to a dangerous sport?
Sport has been an appealing topic in our modern society. People are trying to figure out reasons why numerous people in all ages nowadays are so keen on dangerous sports. My writing will deeply discuss certain reasons.
In the first place, what I put in my priority is personal enjoyment. It cannot be denied that watching dangerous sport performance, people will be always worried about secure for performers. As a result, after each successful stunt, they tend to be filled with please and admiration. This feeling is unique as one is unlikely to find it in another types of entertainment. More importantly, to become a performer in a dangerous sport, one is required to have special skills, which helps him to do seemingly impossible tasks. Therefore, he is able to bring people spectacular and surprising performance, making them satisfied and intrigued. By and large, being a source of happiness for people is one of the major reasons why dangerous sports are widely loved.
In the second place, some people may insist that watching dangerous sport, some people may be too attracted, which leads them to imitate the performers. As a result, they tend to be severely injured. However, this is not necessarily the case since in dangerous sport shows, there are always guidance as well as warning to ensure that no one will try doing too dangerous tasks. Furthermore, being curious about the sports as well as having good guidance, dangerous sport lovers may try to practice skills in a safe way, which helps them fully develop their skill. Besides, through practice, they are bound to be more aware of how dangerous the sport is to their bodies. This makes them more and more careful in protecting themselves from possible injuries. Indeed, the opinion that dangerous sports may be hazard to viewers may end in collapse.
In conclusion, these mentioned above are convincing reasons for my choices. It is highly recommended that people worldwide should take my writing into careful consideration to make appropriate decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[8]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'will' and 'be'.
Suggestion: will always be
...ing dangerous sport performance, people will be always worried about secure for performers. As...
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Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a safe way" with adverb for "safe"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...sport lovers may try to practice skills in a safe way, which helps them fully develop their s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, however, may, second, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, by and large, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08955223881 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73465096187 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567164179104 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.4250928996 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7368421053 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6315789474 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362371638743 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105209186463 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102508365527 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214495752044 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960541938221 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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