Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples.
For everyone, experiencing a great thrill is an amazing feeling. Depending upon personality traits and interest, we find out that people all over the world have different approaches to be excited. In my vantage point, there are a group of people who like doing dangerous sports or other high-risk activities on account of experiencing something exciting to feel delighted by leisure time and becoming famous for acquiring money.
First and foremost, doing hazardous activities is considered a possible way for having an opportunity to feel excited. It is axiomatic that nowadays many people are being attracted to playing thriller sports such as boxing, wrestling, mountain climbing, bungee jumping, and so on because these activities can help people to be happy and satisfied. In fact, dangerous sports have recently become a source of interest. For instance, last year for holidays I joined a group of sportswomen to playing bungee jumping which is near my hometown. As a matter of fact, I never forget that day because I experienced a feeling of excitement that I never felt this passion in ordinary sports like football, tennis and so on. According to recent research conducted in my country, having affection to experience new things is a strong incentive can encourage people to do high-risk activities. Therefore, having experience of doing dangerous sports or activities can make somebody happy.
Moreover, being prominent is another probable outcome of doing dangerous sports or activities. It is crystal-clear many people do some activities even high-risk ones to be famous because it has a lot of advantages which the most important benefit is making money. In fact, for some people doing dangerous activities is a profession which earns money. A prominent psychologist in my country claims that humans per se like to be popular and rich, so we admit to be exposed to danger for being them. To illustrate, in my country, one of the rich people is a man who works in an amusement park and plays with crocodiles. As a matter of fact, he started his work about 5 years ago and carried out a dangerous work that a lot of people enjoyed when watched him and now he is a wealthy and well-known person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'groups'?
Suggestion: groups
...cited. In my vantage point, there are a group of people who like doing dangerous spor...
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Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'admit being'.
Suggestion: admit being
...r se like to be popular and rich, so we admit to be exposed to danger for being them. To il...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24504950495 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.180693069307 0.158761421928 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10396039604 0.0866891130778 120% => OK
Adverbs: 0.029702970297 0.046263068375 64% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0470297029703 0.0685040099705 69% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128712871287 0.118717715034 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0717821782178 0.0351676179071 204% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.88501353676 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0346534653465 0.0309702414327 112% => OK
Particles: 0.0049504950495 0.00188951952338 262% => OK
Determiners: 0.0717821782178 0.0887237588012 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00742574257426 0.0209618222197 35% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0148514851485 0.0139019557991 107% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2209.0 2387.08602151 93% => OK
No of words: 368.0 408.028673835 90% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0027173913 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.407608695652 0.338922669872 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.290760869565 0.251872472559 115% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222826086957 0.174417080927 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.173913043478 0.112833075102 154% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88501353676 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535326086957 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 58.7640564706 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0830170192 48.84282405 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.0625 120.699889404 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.644075263715 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 52.0760869565 45.7405998639 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.73076923077 1.45489161554 119% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276853023795 0.300154397459 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0977099928425 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0859397924854 0.0752933317313 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.442432322459 0.497263757937 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0989086309474 0.151897553556 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111578489425 0.114077575197 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623535826544 0.0781384742642 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.430487233648 0.336927656856 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.059997015267 0.067059652881 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21738884675 0.210909579961 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016589429937 0.0618886996521 27% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.