Asthma is ussually seen as a condition whose symptoms can be adequately controlled with the right medicines. Researchers point out that it is an intermittent disorder,characterized by temporary bouts of inflammation of the airways,which lead to typical sy

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Asthma is ussually seen as a condition whose symptoms can be adequately controlled with the right medicines. Researchers point out that it is an intermittent disorder,characterized by temporary bouts of inflammation of the airways,which lead to typical symptoms such as wheezing,coughing and shortness of breath;after each episode(often known as an attack),symptoms subside and the airways return to normal.

Asthmatics tend to be susceptible to certain triggers in the environment. These include but are not restricted to animal fur,pollen, cigarette smoke,house dust mites and perfumes. Attacks can also be brought on by exercise,emotional sters or a variety of other factors including respiratory infections such as the common cold.

During an episode of asthma, the bronchial tubes and the smaller tubes dividing off from these,known as bronchioles,become narrow or blocked and as a result air can't get in or out of the lungs easily. There are two basic causes behind bronchial narrowing: either the bronchi and bronchioles are squeezed by muscles wrapped arround them rather like elastic bands,or they become blocked by mucus and swelling inside the tubes themselves.When the bronchi are constricted ,the condition is called bronchoconstriction. Occasional squeezing of the bronchi is normal, but in asthma sufferers these muscles may react too sensitively to environmental triggers. It is also a normal function of the bronchial tubes to produce mucus and,in concert with tiny hairs called cilia, to trap inhaled irritants and remove them from the body,thus protecting the lungs. But some asthmatics produce an overabundance of mucus,and this results in blocked airways and consequent asthmatic symptoms.

Summarize the points made in the lecture you heard,explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading.

Asthma is a health condition that the sufferer has difficulty in breathing due to the narrowing of airways. This is a discontinuous health attack and the condition of airways can return to normal after an asthma episode ends.

Recently, however, some researchers have brought new evidence that claimed the narrowing condition of bronchioles, small tubes in respiratory system, can get permanent after an asthma attack. The abnormal condition is called remodeling, which is a consequence of long and repeated episodes of asthma attacks that lead to scars on airways tissue.

While there were two factors related to muscle contraction and over supply of mucus claimed as the fundamental cause of asthma, remodeling are now suggested as the consequence as well as the underlying cause of an asthma. This argument was based on new research on young children that showed many asmathics children have already remodeled their airways.
Genetic factor is the initial and primary cause of remodeling. According to the research, environment factors can also contribute to the risk of certain individuals to develop remodeled vulnerable airways before their births.

New evidence might encourage the researchers to reevaluate the analysis on the underlying cause of asthma as well as the medicines to cure the symptoms and cause.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'airways'' or 'airway's'?
Suggestion: airways'; airway's
...of asthma attacks that lead to scars on airways tissue. While there were two factor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 22.412803532 36% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1124.0 1373.03311258 82% => OK
No of words: 207.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42995169082 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89698830676 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570048309179 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5307495369 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.888888889 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06452816374 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176285461401 0.272083759551 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751510671557 0.0996497079465 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373470321068 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.097758218128 0.162205337803 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427388343585 0.0443174109184 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 53.8541721854 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.0289183223 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.2367328918 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.42419426049 116% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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