The article states that using bottled water wastes money,has adverse effect on consumer's health and provides reasons of support. However, the professor explains that water bottle is unsafe for consumers and its advertisement can be misleading, he agree with each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that the commercials for bottled water may lie and deceive the people. The professor agree with this point by saying that advertisement can be misleading. He states that bottled water's sources may not be accurate and give two examples. The first example was water brand from spring, but it was actually from a park near waste dam. The second example was Pure Glasica, Which was a tap water from Alaska.
Second,the reading posits that bottled water has no fluoride and could affect people's health. However, The professor explains that after testing bottled water of different brands, They found that water has bacteria. The bacterial population was above standard which could affect the immune system and result in problems.According to the professor aldery people, people who have physical problem and who have cancer should avoid bottled water .
Third, the lecture says that the plastic in bottled water has toxic chemicals which contaminate the soil and the ground water. The professor says that chemicals leak from the plastic into the water after ten days and there is no gaide for the time. We also learned that chemicals is not good for human's health and could affect our hormones and reproductive system.
he agree with each of the author's reasons.
he agrees with each of the author's reasons.
The professor agree with this point
The professor agrees with this point
Sentence: The bacterial population was above standard which could affect the immune system and result in problems.According to the professor aldery people, people who have physical problem and who have cancer should avoid bottled water .
Error: aldery Suggestion: ?
Sentence: The professor says that chemicals leak from the plastic into the water after ten days and there is no gaide for the time.
Error: gaide Suggestion: ?
flaws:
why you put 'however' here? it means the professor has different ideas to the reading:
'Second,the reading posits that bottled water has no fluoride and could affect people's health. However, The professor explains..'
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Score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 250 250
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No. of Different Words: 137 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.976 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.288 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.793 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4