manifest destiny
In this set of materials, the author and the lecturer are discussing “Manifest Destiny”. According to the author, this phenomenon refers to an expansion across the country from one ocean to another as God necessiates. The author and the lecturer profoundly contrast each other while the author contends that James Folks’ annexation of Oregon territory to his platform during his presidental campaign showed his strong attitude about the belief of America’s “God given right” to this land and and thanks to it he gained many adherents, the lecturer claims that native Americans had not have been asked about the fate of Oregon territory, instead of this Spanish, Russians, British and Americans were consulted about the ownership of the land. But he states that the Spanish and the Russians moved another parts of the continent and the British and the Americans came across and the Americans took the possession of Oregon territory. The lecturer says that “Manifest Destiny” was questionable, it depends on President Folk’s voters support not native Americans support.
Sentence: According to the author, this phenomenon refers to an expansion across the country from one ocean to another as God necessiates.
Error: necessiates Suggestion: necessitates
Sentence: The author and the lecturer profoundly contrast each other while the author contends that James Folks' annexation of Oregon territory to his platform during his presidental campaign showed his strong attitude about the belief of America's God given right to this land and and thanks to it he gained many adherents, the lecturer claims that native Americans had not have been asked about the fate of Oregon territory, instead of this Spanish, Russians, British and Americans were consulted about the
Error: presidental Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
Not in a correct format.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Score: 14 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 6 12
No. of Words: 170 250
No. of Characters: 879 1200
No. of Different Words: 94 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.611 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.171 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.532 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 51 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.567 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.453 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.453 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 4