The Sociology Department of State University has been receiving negative comments about its program from employers of the graduates of its department. As a result of these negative comments, the department has come to the conclusion that its graduates ar

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The Sociology Department of State University has been receiving negative comments about its program from employers of the graduates of its department. As a result of these negative comments, the department has come to the conclusion that its graduates are not adequately prepared for jobs in their chosen profession because they are lacking expertise in certain areas. The faculty of the department considered this a very serious blow to the reputation of the department, so they began holding a series of meetings to determine the best solution to the problem. Considerable discussion of the problem and possible solutions ensued. As a result of these meetings, the faculty came to the conclusion that a change in the curriculum of the department was the best solution. Up to that point, the department required eight upper-division courses for a major in sociology, and the remaining five courses were elective courses selected from a variety of courses offered by the department. The department decided that the best solution to the problem they were discussing was to increase the number of required courses from three to five, so that a wider variety of topics could be covered in the courses required of all students, and decrease the number of elective courses from five to three, to keep the total number for the major at eight. The department announced the change in the number of required courses from three to five and also announced that this change would affect all students in the department immediately.

The reading passage explains that the Sociology department of State university has received negative comments about its program and presents various solutions. While, the listening passage explains why these solutions are improper for the students who are already through the course. There are various points presented in the listening passage that counterattack with the reading passage.

Firstly, the rule of State University states that the the change in curriculum can only take place when the students are entrying a program, not when it has started. On the other hand the faculty of department came to the conclusion that a change in curriculum of department is the best solution to there program.

Secondly, the State University states that the students who have started with the program could not be forced to follow requirement of curriculum change. The change of curriculum could be forced to the newly admitted students.

Thirdly, the older students had a provision of selecting three required courses and five elective courses. Nevertheless, the newly admitted students can be asked to choose five required courses so that there is wider variety of courses offered and elective courses to be reduced to three. These changes can be immediately implemented only for the newly admitted students not for all the students in the department.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...he rule of State University states that the the change in curriculum can only take plac...
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...he rule of State University states that the the change in curriculum can only take plac...
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...o that there is wider variety of courses offered and elective courses to be reduc...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'while', 'of course', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.25327510917 0.261695866417 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.174672489083 0.158904122519 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.056768558952 0.0723426182421 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0655021834061 0.0435111971325 151% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00873362445415 0.0277247811725 32% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113537117904 0.128828473217 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0698689956332 0.0370669169778 188% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.7355466385 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0305676855895 0.0208969081088 146% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.131004366812 0.128158765124 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0218340611354 0.0158828679856 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0262008733624 0.0114777025283 228% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1355.0 1645.83664459 82% => OK
No of words: 213.0 271.125827815 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.36150234742 6.08160592843 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.04852973271 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.431924882629 0.374372842146 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.37558685446 0.287516216867 131% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.267605633803 0.187439937562 143% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12676056338 0.113142543107 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7355466385 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 145.348785872 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.539623497131 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.2617425234 53.8517498576 80% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0529801325 77% => OK
Sentence length: 21.3 21.7502111507 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8565534859 49.3711431718 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.5 132.220823453 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3 21.7502111507 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.1 0.878197800319 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 58.858685446 50.5018328374 117% => OK
Elegance: 1.75438596491 1.90840788429 92% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473567841863 0.549887131256 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.27021406924 0.142949733639 189% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.132706086784 0.0787303798458 169% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.746401231069 0.631733273073 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.106870913467 0.139662658121 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.251888425686 0.266732575781 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133064216673 0.103435571967 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.45952630999 0.414875509568 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0807033274738 0.0530846634433 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330402959858 0.40443939384 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896448260018 0.0528353158467 170% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.26048565121 70% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.1766004415 94% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.2958057395 87% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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