TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism.

The passage talks about altruism and how the donation of organs and animals like meerkats are examples of altruism. However, the professor refutes these examples by providing reasons for support.

First, the professor says that that the meerkats stand guard after they eaten their food, so while other meerkats are hunting for foot, these guards already have had their meal. This opposes the point in the reading that meerkats stand without eating food.

Second, The professor says that guard meerkats stand next to their burrow, so they are more likely to escape the predators. And this counters the argument in the article that guard meerkats are at a greater risk of getting eaten by predators. Moreover, after hearing the alarm from the guard meerkat the other meerkats start moving in speed and this distracts the predator from the caller.

Third, the passage states that donating body organs to family members, and even to strangers is a selfless act and get nothing in return. However, the professor opposes this point by claiming that the person donating the organ receives appreciation, and non-material rewards are valuable to some people.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mples by providing reasons for support. First, the professor says that that the ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...support. First, the professor says that that the meerkats stand guard after they eat...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'ate'?
Suggestion: ate
...hat the meerkats stand guard after they eaten their food, so while other meerkats are...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, moreover, second, so, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 972.0 1373.03311258 71% => OK
No of words: 187.0 270.72406181 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19786096257 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 4.04702891845 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31671184327 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 145.348785872 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55614973262 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 281.7 419.366225166 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.228734974 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 7.06452816374 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0316959419041 0.272083759551 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0173254361652 0.0996497079465 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490037335978 0.0662205650399 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0281714505773 0.162205337803 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487943837229 0.0443174109184 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.3589403974 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 63.6247240618 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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