TOEFL Sample essay : integrated essay from TPO 12

The reading and listening both are discussed about a teenage portrait of Jane Austen. While reading stats that the portrait are real and it subject was Jane Austen and it provides three supporting reasons. The professor refutes this points, says that canvas portrait are not Jane Austen and there is no evidence that proves Jane Austen in the portrait.

Firstly, the reading claim that in 1882 Jane Austen family gave permission to used in edition of her letters and Jane Austen family endorsed that it was Austen in the portrait. However, the professor refutes this point by saying that the portrait was published 70 year after death of Jane Austen. that's why it confusing Jane Austen is on the portrait or not.

Secondly, the article posits that the portrait are completely match with Cassandra's sketch and portrait provide details about Jane Austen face. However, the lecture argues this point by stating in real member of Jane Austen family and they are closely related with Jane Austen. Moreover, some one think it's Jane Austen relatives mary and catin maybe the model of portrait.

Finally, the reading say that portrait are unsigned and undated, ozias humphrey was active in 1780 to 1790. It denoted that this time Jane Austen was a teenage girl. However, the professor refutes this point by say that it the time when Jane Austen was teenage girl, Humphery are not sale his canvas . he start selling canvas when Jane Austen was 27 year old.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ten and there is no evidence that proves Jane Austen in the portrait. Firstly,...
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...ne Austen family gave permission to used in edition of her letters and Jane Aust...
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...y saying that the portrait was published 70 year after death of Jane Austen. that...
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...h of Jane Austen. thats why it confusing Jane Austen is on the portrait or not. ...
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...ketch and portrait provide details about Jane Austen face. However, the lecture a...
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...ely related with Jane Austen. Moreover, some one think its Jane Austen relatives mary an...
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... 1780 to 1790. It denoted that this time Jane Austen was a teenage girl. However,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 30.3222958057 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1212.0 1373.03311258 88% => OK
No of words: 246.0 270.72406181 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92682926829 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18890974459 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 145.348785872 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479674796748 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 370.8 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6489826461 49.2860985944 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2307692308 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9230769231 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 7.06452816374 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 4.19205298013 406% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.552454298585 0.272083759551 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.274756566308 0.0996497079465 276% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884634392978 0.0662205650399 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.416976645478 0.162205337803 257% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540332135239 0.0443174109184 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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