TPO-01 Integrated Writing
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Directions: You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically an effective response will be 300 words at least.
Question: Summarise the points made in the lecture,being sure to explain how they cast doubt on specific points made in the reading passage.
In the United States, employees typically work five days a week for eight hours each day. However, many employees want to work a four-day week and are willing to accept less pay inorder to do so. A mandatory policy requiring companies to offer their employees the option of working a four-day workweek for four-fifths (80 percent)of their normal pay would benefit the economy as a whole as well as the individual companies and the employees who decided to take the option. The shortened workweek would increase company profits because employees would feel more rested and alert, and as a result, they would make fewer costly errors in their work. Hiring morestaff to ensure that the same amount of work would be accomplished would not result in additional payroll costs because four-day employees would only be paid 80 percent of the normal rate. In the end, companies would have fewer overworked and error-prone employees for the same money, which would increase company profits. For the country as a whole, one of the primary benefits of offering this option to employees is that it would reduce unemployment rates. If many full-time employees started working fewer hours, some of their workload would have to be shifted to others. Thus, for every four employees who went on an 80 percent week, a new employee could be hired at the 80 percent rate. Finally, the option of a four-day workweek would be better for individual employees. Employees who could afford a lower salary in exchange for more free time could improve the quality of their lives by spending the extra time with their families, pursuing private interests, or enjoying leisure activities.
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The reading states that the companies that offer their employees a four day work can benefits the company itself and the countrey economy and provide three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that will not be a good benefit at all and refutes each point of the auther's reasons.
First, the article states that the four day work will benefit the company and individual companies because the employees will work for 4 days and they will be more rested and alert and that will decrease the numbers of errors that ocurre. The lecturer claims that this policy will enforce the company to spent a lot of money to add more employees so more money for the training, health insurrence and for more offices.
Second, the reading passage says that will decrease the work load and reduced the unemployement rate. However, the speaker refutes that by saying this will be more expensive for the companies he discussed before, because hiring is more expensive and this will add more options to raise the number of expectations that if the employee can do the same work of five days in four days so there will be no more additional jobs and the current job will be unpleasant.
Finally, the auther claims that policy will give the employees more time to spend in their personal lives and this will reflect in a positive way on their work. But the professor disagrees that. He states that will result in a lot of risks in reducing the quality of work and decrease the job ability and career advancement. So the four-days employees will be the first to lose their jobs if there is any economy turningdown. In addition the companies would prefer to hire the five-days employees for supervision and management positions because they can manage their work in a best way.
Sentence: The reading states that the companies that offer their employees a four day work can benefits the company itself and the countrey economy and provide three reasons of support.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to can and benefits
the professor explains that will not be a good benefit
the professor explains that it will not be a good benefit
the reading passage says that will decrease the work load
the reading passage says that it will decrease the work load
He states that will result in a lot of risks
He states that it will result in a lot of risks
Sentence: The lecturer claims that this policy will enforce the company to spent a lot of money to add more employees so more money for the training, health insurrence and for more offices.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and spent
Sentence: In addition the companies would prefer to hire the five-days employees for supervision and management positions because they can manage their work in a best way.
Description: The token a is not usually followed by an adjective, superlative
Suggestion: Refer to a and best
Sentence: The reading states that the companies that offer their employees a four day work can benefits the company itself and the countrey economy and provide three reasons of support.
Error: countrey Suggestion: country
Sentence: First, the article states that the four day work will benefit the company and individual companies because the employees will work for 4 days and they will be more rested and alert and that will decrease the numbers of errors that ocurre.
Error: ocurre Suggestion: course
Sentence: The lecturer claims that this policy will enforce the company to spent a lot of money to add more employees so more money for the training, health insurrence and for more offices.
Error: insurrence Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Second, the reading passage says that will decrease the work load and reduced the unemployement rate.
Error: unemployement Suggestion: unemployment
Sentence: Finally, the auther claims that policy will give the employees more time to spend in their personal lives and this will reflect in a positive way on their work.
Error: auther Suggestion: author
Sentence: So the four-days employees will be the first to lose their jobs if there is any economy turningdown.
Error: turningdown Suggestion: turning down
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Words: 307 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 11 12
No. of Words: 307 250
No. of Characters: 1439 1200
No. of Different Words: 140 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.186 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.687 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.372 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.847 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4