TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

The lecture and reading are both about the paintings of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters which is about the distributed painters to him, especially the one of en Elderly women in a white bonnet. The author believes the painters really belong to Rembrandt while the lecture thinks that the Luxurious fur collar has been added to his original one in order to make it more valuable.
The lecturer says that the x-rays and pigment analysis shows that the fur collar return to 100 years after the original one has been painted. The light shadow style of the Rembrandt doesn't appear in this one; where, the present painter shows the illuminated face has become in dark not partially colored as the original painting; because of, the fur collar doesn't appear the reflect on the light as it was in the original paint. Moreover, the back of the painter has enlarged with other pieces of wood from the top and the sides in order to enlarge it;the single wood panel has been discovered that its return back to the same tree from which another panel of wood, Rembrandt draw a picture for himself wearing a hat.

The author, saying that the painter has the same style as the Rembrandt style, the woman face representation is the same as Rembrandt way. But there are some problems in the painter about the way by which, the woman is dress where she is wearing a linen cap might be wearied by the servants with a luxurious fur collar which is so expensive. Furthermore, Rembrandt is the master of the light and shadow, but this is not appearing in the painter where the partial shadow that should appear on the face is covered by the darkness of the fur collar.

In conclusion, the author could be agreed on that there any modifications that happened to the original picture of Rembrandt but both of them has mentioned his own argument.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...one in order to make it more valuable. The lecturer says that the x-rays and pigme...
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Line 2, column 142, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...fter the original one has been painted. The light shadow style of the Rembrandt doe...
^^^
Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...The light shadow style of the Rembrandt doesnt appear in this one; where, the present ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 357, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...al painting; because of, the fur collar doesnt appear the reflect on the light as it w...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ecause of, the fur collar doesnt appear the reflect on the light as it was in the original ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 603, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...wood panel has been discovered that its return back to the same tree from which another pan...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 676, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Rembrandt) must be used with a third-person verb: 'draws'.
Suggestion: draws
... which another panel of wood, Rembrandt draw a picture for himself wearing a hat. ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 414, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...aster of the light and shadow, but this is not appearing in the painter where the partial shadow...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 18, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is own argument.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 322.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79192546584 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50802692697 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472049689441 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => OK
Sentence length: 35.0 21.2450331126 165% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0354512467 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.444444444 110.228320801 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.7777777778 21.698381199 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378950626042 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156008769531 0.0996497079465 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681354846603 0.0662205650399 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215461424584 0.162205337803 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853573341507 0.0443174109184 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.3589403974 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.498013245 152% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.2008830022 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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