TPO-09 - Integrated Writing Task Car manufacturers and governments have been eagerly seeking a replacement for the automobile's main source of power, the internal-combustion engine. By far the most promising alternative source of energy for cars is the hy

According to the reading passage, hydrogen based fuel cell engine is better than combustion engine for automobile source of power, because of readily availability of hydrogen, cheaper, and less pollution. However, according to lecture, hydrogen is not good solution as source of power because of not easily produce hydrogen, not safe for environment and expensive.
Firstly, the article states that combustion engine is depending on the petroleum and gasoline but hydrogen easily available in vast of sources and it is renewable sources. In contrast, the lecturer mentions that hydrogen not easily produce because of need the liquid stage in -250 Celsius degree and it is not possible to hydrogen obtain in the natural source, therefore require to produce artificial and cooling laboratory, consequently hydrogen is difficult to produce.
Secondly, the passage implies that hydrogen based fuel cell not pollute the environment as compare to combustion engine. On the other hand, the speaker explains that purification of the hydrogen form the water get harm the natural environment hence, burning coal pollute the environment.
Thirdly, according to the reading, fuel cell engines cheaper. However, the professor point out that fuel engine need the component made of the platinum for chemical reaction, without platinum not any chemical process occur which is require to produce power in fuel cell. Platinum is too much expensive.
To sum up, it is clearly observed that the ideas depicted in the reading has been refutes by speaker with sufficient evidence and example.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 52, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...e article states that combustion engine is depending on the petroleum and gasoline but hydro...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'producing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: producing
...n the natural source, therefore require to produce artificial and cooling laboratory, cons...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...lains that purification of the hydrogen form the water get harm the natural environm...
^^^^
Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...not any chemical process occur which is require to produce power in fuel cell. Platinum...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 240, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'producing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: producing
...chemical process occur which is require to produce power in fuel cell. Platinum is too muc...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, in contrast, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 244.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4631147541 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72324578203 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52868852459 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1526853277 49.2860985944 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.3 110.228320801 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.5 7.06452816374 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414718954251 0.272083759551 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168857396138 0.0996497079465 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125921259043 0.0662205650399 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207558647681 0.162205337803 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118850578073 0.0443174109184 268% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.3589403974 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 53.8541721854 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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