TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

In the lecture, the professor discusses why the three accusations on private fossil collectors mentioned in the passage are not convincing.

To begin with, the passage claims that fossils owned by private collectors are not accessible to the public, which is regretful. Nonetheless, the speaker refutes this and argues that if fossils can be bought by private sectors, then schools and libraries are also likely to be the privates owners, which can actually make fossils more approachable to the general public.

Secondly, the lecturer rules out the arguments in the reading that fossil buyers bar scientists from working on those treasured scientific materials. As every single piece of fossil has to be evaluated for its real value by professionals before entering the market, this provides researchers with exclusive opportunity to study the fossil before it is bought by private collectors.

Finally, the instructor opposes the last idea in the reading material, which states that untrained fossil owners tend to destroy or ignore the subtle scientific evidence in fossils. Although non-scientists are likely to cause damages to the fossils, the speaker points out, their enthusiasm and ability in excavating more fossils can be beneficial to the scientific community. Without them, many fossils would simply remain under earth.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...y make fossils more approachable to the general public. Secondly, the lecturer rules out th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as to, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1136.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 206.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5145631068 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80525408236 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626213592233 0.540411800872 116% => OK
syllable_count: 349.2 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.638902757 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 110.228320801 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 21.698381199 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06452816374 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.474461386789 0.272083759551 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205268279073 0.0996497079465 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503859743684 0.0662205650399 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271653598866 0.162205337803 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680129226036 0.0443174109184 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.3589403974 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 53.8541721854 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.2367328918 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.42419426049 117% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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