TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

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TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The reading passage states that many advertising companies have started to implement a new method, named "buzzing," to attract people to buy their products. The passage adds that buzzing has created a lot of controversies, and many critics would like to see it stopped, and then provides three reasons for supporting the idea. The speaker, however, casts serious doubts on this claim and believes that none of these reasons are convincing.
First, the passage claims that as a buzzer is being paid to praise the product, this person may give incorrect information about the product. On the other hand, the lecturer makes the argument that they always tell the truth and this is not true. He firmly believes that companies advertise products which have good qualities and well-made materials. Moreover, he comments that they are paid, to tell the truth just like the place he works.
Second, the reading declares that as buzzers pretend they are like ordinary people, consumers do not have the chance to criticize their products, while the lecturer disagrees and thinks that this can not be the case. He asserts that according to their company's experience, In most of the cases people ask many questions about the quality, price, and the expiration period of the product. As a matter of fact, people buy the most practical and well-made products, and it is unlikely that they believe whatever they hear from the buzzer.
Third, although the reading passage posits that buzzing has some detrimental effects on social relationships, the speaker refutes this claim and says that this method, in essence, raises people's trust. He declares that if their products' quality is bad, the company will not be able to employ buzzers to praise them. Thus, if they win the satisfaction of their customers, a trusting cycle will form, and people will become more open-minded and tend to trust more.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...lement a new method, named 'buzzing,' to attract people to buy their product...
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Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...zing has created a lot of controversies, and many critics would like to see it st...
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Line 1, column 339, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... three reasons for supporting the idea. The speaker, however, casts serious doubts ...
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Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... according to their companys experience, In most of the cases people ask many que...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, third, thus, well, while, as a matter of fact, on the other hand, to tell the truth

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 22.412803532 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 312.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07692307692 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62932277674 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 145.348785872 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554487179487 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8572529066 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.846153846 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06452816374 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409947845249 0.272083759551 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134996225749 0.0996497079465 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657287160808 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233774044756 0.162205337803 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613446074155 0.0443174109184 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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