TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The article discusses the buzzing ads has generate a lot of controversy, and many critics would like to see it banned. However, the lecture is about one student who works as buzzer, discusses how buzzers are working and he refutes each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading states that consumers have the rights to know whether a person praising a product is being paid to do so. The student refutes this point by stating that this this not true. Even though buzzers have been paid to do adveristment, only good people are working.

Second, the article claims that consumers listen to buzzers endorsement to a product less critically than they should. On the other hand, the student explains that by working as a buzzers, people usually ask so many questions about the product you are advertisment for. Such as price, service, and how long you have been usuing this porduct. He also says if you do not have responses for these questions, people will not buy the product.

Thrid, the reading states that buzzing has a negative impact on socail relationships, in other words, people will not trust each other. The student opposes this point by saying this is very bad idea. He adds that companies will not be able to recrute you, if they do not have a good product. When you do on phone services, you will expose to a lot of experiences, in addition to being trustful and open to people.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'generated'.
Suggestion: generated
...e article discusses the buzzing ads has generate a lot of controversy, and many critics ...
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Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: this
...dent refutes this point by stating that this this not true. Even though buzzers have been...
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Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a buzzer' or simply 'buzzers'?
Suggestion: a buzzer; buzzers
...the student explains that by working as a buzzers, people usually ask so many questions a...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, in addition, such as, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1156.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71836734694 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4613090993 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 145.348785872 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551020408163 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1119907454 49.2860985944 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.9230769231 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8461538462 21.698381199 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38813105595 0.272083759551 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136837513754 0.0996497079465 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905075593058 0.0662205650399 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225193487485 0.162205337803 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644724570598 0.0443174109184 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 53.8541721854 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 11.0289183223 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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