TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The article discusses that insides T.rex, a dinosaur, leg bone fossils represents remains of boold vessels, red blood cells, and collagen matrix. The author provides three reasons of supports. However, the professor explains that this explanation is skeptical and he refutes each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading avers that small branching channels inside the fossilized leg bone contains soft, flexible organic substance. this represents the remains of the actual blood vessels. The professor opposes this point by saying this is not necssary represents blood vessels. He suggests that it could be bacteria colonies that usually colonize the dinosaur hollow bones. and the soft, flexible, organic material is just a traces of these bacterial colonies and not not blood vessels remains of the dinosaur.

Second, the article claims that microscopic examination of the various parts of bone revealed that the presence of spheres that could be the remains of red blood cells. Test have shown these spheres contain iron metal and had dark red centers. The professor, on the other hand, explains that the reddish could come from not the dinosaur but from other primitive animals that have no red blood cells. Also, he says that the spheres shape might be reddish materials and not represents the shape of the red blood cells as the author would like us to believe.

Third, the reading posits that test had been performed on the leg bone that showed that it contained collagen. The professor disagree with this point by stating collagen matrix have never found. Because the life spam of collagen is less than 1000 years. So, we cannot find collagen that comes from dinosaur leg that lived about 70 million years ago. He emphaisez that scientifically unacceptable. the professor concludes that since humans have collagen on their skin, it could be comes from reseachers skins when they handle the dinosaur leg bone.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...tains soft, flexible organic substance. this represents the remains of the actual bl...
^^^^
Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...lly colonize the dinosaur hollow bones. and the soft, flexible, organic material is...
^^^
Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a trace' or simply 'traces'?
Suggestion: a trace; traces
...oft, flexible, organic material is just a traces of these bacterial colonies and not not...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: not
... traces of these bacterial colonies and not not blood vessels remains of the dinosaur. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he other hand, explains that the reddish could come from not the dinosaur but fro...
^^
Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ating collagen matrix have never found. Because the life spam of collagen is less than ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 398, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...aisez that scientifically unacceptable. the professor concludes that since humans h...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 312.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18269230769 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42483783187 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532051282051 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2304051898 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8333333333 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72222222222 7.06452816374 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.498686240738 0.272083759551 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148487757874 0.0996497079465 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110715665944 0.0662205650399 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292103172156 0.162205337803 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420087318795 0.0443174109184 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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