TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task In 1938 an archaeologist in Iraq acquired a set of clay jars that had been excavated two years earlier by villagers constructing a railroad line. The vessel was about 2,200 years old. Each clay jay contained a copper cylin

The article states that vessels, that have been discovered in Iraq, were unlikely to use as elctric batteries , and povides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that the vessels could have been used as a electric source, and she refutes each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading claims that if this vessels were truly used as batteries, we should have been found at the excavated location evidences of electric conductors, such as metal wires. Conversely, the profssor explains that the absence of wires have happened because people who were responsible for excavation are locals and not experts in archaeology field. Therefore, they could have been found evidences of electric conductors, but they did not recognized them, ore migh have been thrown away.

Second, the article avers that since the copper cylinders look exactly to what discovered in the Seleucia city, these cylinders were used for holding scrolls of sacred texts. The professor, on the other hand, refutes this point by saying the copper cylinders were true are look alike than in Seleeucia location, but this does not prove anything. She explains that people could had discovered another use for these cylinders later. With the combination of Iron and some liquid, you would get a battery. The professor concludes that cooper was first origniated for a specific purose, after that it could adopted for something else like producing electricity.

Third, the reading avers that even if ancient people could generated electricty, they had no device to relied on electricity. The professor opposes this point by saying the use of electricty could be for producing mild shock. Since people could have been able to generate an invisible power, such as electricity, they could convince others to use of batteries.
Moreover, the professor mentions that the vessels that generated electricity could have been used for healing purposes as muscle stimulus. Also, the vessels could be used for relief aches, or pain.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ere unlikely to use as elctric batteries , and povides three reasons of support. H...
^^
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hat the vessels could have been used as a electric source, and she refutes each o...
^
Line 3, column 35, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
.... First, the reading claims that if this vessels were truly used as batteries, w...
^^^^
Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld have been found evidences of electric conductors, but they did not recognized ...
^^
Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'recognize'
Suggestion: recognize
... electric conductors, but they did not recognized them, ore migh have been thrown away. ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...nything. She explains that people could had discovered another use for these cylind...
^^^
Line 5, column 603, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'adopt'
Suggestion: adopt
... a specific purose, after that it could adopted for something else like producing elect...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 60, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'generate'
Suggestion: generate
...avers that even if ancient people could generated electricty, they had no device to relie...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1373.03311258 123% => OK
No of words: 321.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26791277259 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55562891471 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542056074766 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 419.366225166 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5191802801 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.733333333 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.517961311573 0.272083759551 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172146365486 0.0996497079465 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745651029485 0.0662205650399 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280680485592 0.162205337803 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440719037778 0.0443174109184 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 63.6247240618 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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