TPO 28
Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him into an international celebrity. Though some historians have expressed doubts that Peary did in fact reach the North Pole, three arguments provide strong support for the truth of Peary's claim. First, the National Geographic Society put together a committee that was instructed to conduct a thorough investigation of Peary's records and equipment. At the end of the investigation, the committee concluded that Peary's accounts were consistent and persuasive and declared that he had indeed reached the North Pole. Second, a recent expedition provides support for Peary's claim that he reached the North Pole in only 37 days after setting out from Ellesmere Island off the coast of Greenland. Skeptics used to argue that Peary could not have traveled that fast, since even modern snowmobiles take longer to cover the same distance. However, a British explorer named Tom Avery recently made the same trek in less than 37 days. In fact, Avery used the same kind of dogsled and the same number and breed of dogs as Peary had. Thus, Peary's claims are not impossible, and he very well might have been telling the truth. Third, there are photographs taken by Peary that support his claim to have reached the North Pole. Measuring the shadows in Peary's photographs makes it possible to calculate the Surf s position in the sun. The Surf s position established from the photographs corresponds exactly to the Surf s position as it should have been at the North Pole on that day. This provides strong evidence that Peary reached the North Pole and took the photographs there.
Both the reading and the lecture discuss the Robert E.Peary claim regarding reaching the North Pole in 1909. The reading provides three arguments to support the Peary's claim. However, in the lecture, the professor says that there is not any solid evidence to support Peary's claim and she says that the readings' arguments are unconvincing.
First, the reading states the investigation conducted by the National Geographic Society declared that he had indeed reached the North pole. The professor refutes this point by saying that the committee's claim was completely objective. She says that the committee's members were Peary's friends and also they paid for his trip to the North Pole. Moreover, the investigation was done in just two days, which is not enough time. Therefore, the Investigation was bias and not trustworthy.
Second, The reading asserts that a recent expedition provides support for Peary's claim that he reached the North Pole in 37 days. The professor contradict this by explaining that Tom Avery 's trip condition was not similar to Peary's trip. She says that in Avery trek the food was not carried by the dogsled, but it was dropped by an airplane. Moreover, the weather condition was not the same. Thus, these two trips were different, and the Avery's trip cannot support the Peary's claim.
Finally, the reading states that the photos taken by Peary support his claim, because we can measure the shows and calculate the Surf's position of the sun. The professor rejects this point. She says that those photos are taken 100 years ago with a basic camera. There are blur and fated. Therefore, they cannot accurately show the sun's position. Thus there are not a solid evidence.
there is not any solid evidence
there is no any solid evidence
the Investigation was bias and not trustworthy.
the Investigation was biased and not trustworthy.
Sentence: The professor contradict this by explaining that Tom Avery 's trip condition was not similar to Peary's trip.
Description: The fragment professor contradict this is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace contradict with verb, past tense
Thus there are not a solid evidence.
Thus they are not a solid evidence.
Thus it is not a solid evidence.
Thus there are no solid evidences.
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
a lot of 'She says...'
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