TPO 3 - Integrated:Rembrandt portrait -the woman with fur collar-

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TPO 3 - Integrated:
Rembrandt portrait -the woman with fur collar-

In the reading, the author claims that the famous portrait in Rembrandt collection, which depicted the woman's face with fur collar, was eliminated from the official catalog of Rembrandt paintings in 1930s due to 3 problems regarding it. However, finding all the ideas questionable and plausible, the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text and brings some evidences to the contrary.
At first, the author argues that the congruity of the woman's dress which combined the servant linen cap with the costly coat with fur collar. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that the recent scrutinizing of this portrait has revealed that the fur collar is not the part of the original painting. Indeed, this piece was added on the top pf the original art virtually 100 years after it had been drew. She said that may be someone thought that if the appearance of the aristocratic woman seems better, the value of the portrait will be raise.
In addition, the reading passage holds the view that the shadows and lights are not in consonance with each other because of entirely bright face of the woman. On the other hand, the lecturer disputed this point by clarifying the fact that in the Rembrandt original painting, the color was simple without dark fur that reflected the light. Consequently, removing the fur, we can see that the combination of shadows and lights is perfect such as others Rembrandts' work.
Finally, the author asserts the glued pieces of wood instead of only the one wooden panel as the last point for supporting this portrait does not attribute to Rembrandt. The lecturer, thought, dismisses it by pointing out that having added the fur collar, that person forced to attach additional piece of wood in order to increase the value of painting. Furthermore, another crucial point is that according to the recent examination the wood of this portrait is same as another famous painting from Rembrandt, the self-portrait with the hat.

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1930s'.
Suggestion: in the 1930s
...official catalog of Rembrandt paintings in 1930s due to 3 problems regarding it. However...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 405, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'drawn'.
Suggestion: drawn
...t virtually 100 years after it had been drew. She said that may be someone thought t...
^^^^
Line 2, column 425, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...s after it had been drew. She said that may be someone thought that if the appearance ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, in addition, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 330.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96666666667 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59364378095 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557575757576 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.2191928653 49.2860985944 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.583333333 110.228320801 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 21.698381199 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06452816374 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358915642114 0.272083759551 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123231562079 0.0996497079465 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901085799754 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214867537568 0.162205337803 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407095906757 0.0443174109184 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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