TPO 42

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TPO 42

The reading passage claims that there are several solutions that responsible businesses can use to prevent injuries which comes from using glasses in design of buildings to birds. However, the lecturer casts serious doubt in this claim by presenting counter-arguments and examples. He believes that none of these strategies are stop birds from injuring.

Firstly, the lecturer contends that one way glasses have their own problem due to they work as a mirror, thus birds do not have this ability to realize that they see the picture, it means that if they see the reflect of the sky or tree absolutely they think that this is a reality, hence they continue their flying. This, however, is contradict to the passage mentions that if birds cannot see through a window, they will understand that the glass forms a solid barrier and will not try to fly through it.

On the other hand, it is noted in the passage that architecture can use colorful designs in order to birds would see the stripes and avoid to try to fly through the glass. In contrast, he clearly asserts that if we use some designs with normal distances which beneficial for people who are in the building to see out, maybe birds imagine that these are holes, thus continue flying through them, conversely if we use lot of shapes that close each other, therefore make a dark environment in the building that is not suitable condition for people who are in this place.

Finally, The speaker points out that using magnetic devices is not practical thanks to birds use this ability for long distances, for instance, if they want to migrate to another place because they do not want to miss the way they use this skill, though it is not useful for them when they fly from one side of a city to another side because in this situation they get help from the brightness and their eyes. Nonetheless, the text argues that create an artificial magnetic field to guide birds away from buildings is a good method to prevent birds from injuries.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the picture, it means that if they see the reflect of the sky or tree absolutely they thin...
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Line 5, column 335, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'contradicted'.
Suggestion: contradicted
...ontinue their flying. This, however, is contradict to the passage mentions that if birds c...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 134, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid trying'.
Suggestion: avoid trying
...rder to birds would see the stripes and avoid to try to fly through the glass. In contrast, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 12.0772626932 174% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 22.412803532 219% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1373.03311258 121% => OK
No of words: 350.0 270.72406181 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76571428571 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4370205965 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517142857143 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 21.2450331126 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.076603059 49.2860985944 236% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 185.333333333 110.228320801 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.8888888889 21.698381199 179% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.5555555556 7.06452816374 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.500090244915 0.272083759551 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.212272045934 0.0996497079465 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114360987628 0.0662205650399 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286476992672 0.162205337803 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571641830606 0.0443174109184 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.3589403974 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.0289183223 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.98 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.498013245 164% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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