TPO 46

Essay topics:

TPO 46

In the reading passage, the author claims that there are three viable advantages of constituting the electonic medical record system,which is storing the patniets' informatin in electroinic databases, instead of utilizing paper-based storage. However, finding all the ideas implausible and questionable, the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text and states some evidence to the contrary.
At first, the author agues that a substantial drop in cost as well as in space are accounted as undeniable benefits of electronic records. Conversely, the lecturer contends that as for a point about the saving money it will not be as significant as the reading mentioned. Furthermore, doctors who incline to use this system do not rely merely on the elecronic system. Indeed, they keep storing the papers as a back ground documents in emergency cases as they are included their signitures which is useful for ligal purposes. Consequently, their adaptation to new record system has nothing to do with the space poblem for storage.
In addition, the reading passage holds the view that some critical errors, such as illigible handwriting and improper transciption data ,will be ommited thanks to using the electronic medical records. On the contrary, the professor dismisses this idea by clarifying the fact that this approach will not ellminiate these obstacles. As a matter of fact, even doctors adopted this new method write various experiminets for their patients which including their hanwriting. Having enetr the data into electronic database, their sattf interpret their scripts. Therefore, their understanding of the doctors' writings may lead to some inevitable errors.
Finally, The authors assers that these electronic database can assist medical researches. The professor, thought, repudiate this claim by subscribing the fact that the information recorded in this database are not availbale for everyone. Indeed, there are tight regulation regarding keeping the patients' informtion private. Thuse, if someone wants to have access to this medical information, he has no other choice but following stirct rules nad getting myriad permission including the patients. Note to this point that mostof the time paintient do not allowed to use their data for any purpose by blocking the users' access.

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Average: 6 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...ting the electonic medical record system,which is storing the patniets informatin in e...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 559, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'record'.
Suggestion: record
...oses. Consequently, their adaptation to new record system has nothing to do with the space...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 136, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ndwriting and improper transciption data ,will be ommited thanks to using the elec...
^^
Line 4, column 561, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...ostof the time paintient do not allowed to use their data for any purpose by blocking ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... purpose by blocking the users access.  
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, as for, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, as well as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1960.0 1373.03311258 143% => OK
No of words: 358.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4748603352 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87081812455 2.5805825403 111% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 145.348785872 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600558659218 0.540411800872 111% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 419.366225166 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9553230824 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.294117647 110.228320801 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4117647059 7.06452816374 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303353217591 0.272083759551 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840299898088 0.0996497079465 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056479633016 0.0662205650399 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174914872764 0.162205337803 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336489165175 0.0443174109184 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.3589403974 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.2367328918 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.42419426049 119% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 63.6247240618 190% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.7273730684 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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