TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The article states that storing patient’s medical records in electronic database has several advantages ober traditional paper-based record keeping and provides three reasons of support. Conversely, the professor states the benefits of keeing patient’s medical records on electronic database in uncertain, and she refutes each od the author’s reasons.

First, the reading avers that the use of electronic records can help reduce cost on storing and transferring records. The professor opposes this point by saying there is no significant beneficial. Doctors still have to pay for storaging, bacuse they will not throw paper records for the reasons of emergency backup, or for legal reasons. So, in addition to adopt electronic records, they will have to storage the paper form too.

Second, the article claims that electronic medical records are essential to reducethe chances of medical errors, such as human errors. The professor, on the other hand, explains that by adapting medical records, human errors, such as poor writing hand, will not eliminate. Doctors still have to use pen and paper while doing their jobs, so they write by their hands. After that, a specialist staff will enter the information electronically into the system. Therefore, electronic medical erros will not reduce medical errors.

Third, the reading posits that electronic medical records can significantly aid medical research by facilating gathering huge amount of patients data records. However, the professor refutes this point by explaining that it will not necessarly benefit medical researches. She says that accessing to patients records subject to restricated privacy laws. In order to collect data from patient records, they should obtain a permission to do so. This thing is not always granted, in addition to, patients have the right to block use of their infromation.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, third, while, in addition, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 287.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56097560976 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81090745035 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554006968641 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3932704585 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.75 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 21.698381199 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.555206318647 0.272083759551 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184787893578 0.0996497079465 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128237146158 0.0662205650399 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.34766337303 0.162205337803 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387563116318 0.0443174109184 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.67 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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