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Both the reading and lecture are about a type of marine mammal species which lived in the coast of Siberia and also was known as Staller’s sea cow. The mentioned population was extinct in 1768. The reading provides three reasons as factors which contributed with this extinction and then supports them. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made in the article and finds all arguments dubious.

First of all, the author of reading declares that there is a possibility that native people of Siberia may have hunted this poor population of sea cow since a sea cow was a nutrient source of food. This point is challenged by the professor and he points out that it should be noted that aforementioned native people were not populous and then he elaborates on this by mentioning that sea cow was a huge creature and a couple of sea cows was enough for several months; hence, the Siberian people did not need to hunt all of them.

Secondly, the article contends that a shift in ecosystem may have affected environment; therefore the kelp population which was the main resource of food for sea cows, declined in such a harsh condition; consequently, the reduction of kelp had negative impacts on these marine mammals; in contrast, the lecturer refutes this hypothesis and expresses that if the mentioned change was very serious; subsequently, the population of other marine animals had to reduce such as whales; however, any document has not been reported by fishers in related to decline of whales. Thus, the population of kelp was stable and the sea cows did not confront shortage of food.

Finally, the reading passage states that European fur traders may have entered to Siberia and since they had weapon, so they could kill a large number of sea cows. This argument is rebutted by the lecturer again and he poses that when European traders came to the Siberia island, the Staller population had started dwindling formerly-from one hundred years ago.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 309, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...this extinction and then supports them. The lecturer casts doubt on the claims made...
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Line 8, column 137, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...nce they had weapon, so they could kill a large number of sea cows. This argument is rebutted by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, in contrast, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 332.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92469879518 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62399535967 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545180722892 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 21.2450331126 155% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.321333602 49.2860985944 295% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.5 110.228320801 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2 21.698381199 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.5 7.06452816374 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45419315901 0.272083759551 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182822515768 0.0996497079465 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109089085041 0.0662205650399 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257931256237 0.162205337803 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739168073387 0.0443174109184 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.3589403974 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.498013245 145% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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