Parenting is a key element of any human being and society. Through parenting, great values can be transmitted to the future generations. Parenting can also provide the right education and conditions to future adults to prosperous. In the following paragraphs I will point out some of the qualities that I assume Parents should have in order to be consider "Good Parents".
First of all, Parents should spend some time with their kids. It seems obvious but there are a lot of parents that don´t do it, because of their high demanding jobs or other reasons. In fact, some of my friends whose dad´s or moms didn´t spend much time with them, tend to suffer a lot and are always seeking attention and getting in trouble. Secondly, I think parents should give the basic respectful values like, being graceful, honest, kind; a good and respectful person, in essence. This is particular important, because we live in a society, and therefore, individuals must respect each other and have strong moral values to be integrated in a developed, interactive and peaceful society. All of we know many individuals that had great success but because of their bad attitude, they were doomed by society. For instances, some record selling rappers come to my mind, like Tupac and Biggie Smalls, that are examples of arrogant and disrespectful attitudes, that lead to their success but also to their dead. Thirdly, I can´t forget to mention, the hard working skills, to which I think parents can transmit to their children by making them work for what their want rather than always making all their wishes and dreams true. In my opinion, life is all about sacrifices and collecting the "fruits" that you´ve "planted", thus if an individual is raised in a manner that he doesn´t has to work or do something to get what he wants, he will be a loser as an adult, and will have a lot of trouble having success in any domain (like relationships and career, for example), and may all be due for the mentioned type of parenting, where parents treat their children has kings or lords. Last but not least, parents should give some liberty and decisive power to their children. It might sound a litle contradictory to what I have exposed, but future adults should have free will to what they want, parents should only trie to guide, giving the right tools for being a good working human being. Decisions like which carreer should one pursue, which person should one chose to marry, should be in the hands of each and everyone of us and are principles of a free society.
In summary, I believe that good parents should raise their children affording the time to transmit respectful values, to prepare them to a high competitive adult life, but also giving them space and liberty so they can live their lives with free will.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, in summary, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 5.04856512141 456% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 29.0 7.30242825607 397% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 22.412803532 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 30.3222958057 198% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 1373.03311258 173% => OK
No of words: 484.0 270.72406181 179% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89462809917 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.04702891845 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76143378138 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 145.348785872 169% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506198347107 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 419.366225166 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 2.5761589404 388% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.4110542742 49.2860985944 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.352941176 110.228320801 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4705882353 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1764705882 7.06452816374 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130078659531 0.272083759551 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054602368175 0.0996497079465 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047257226729 0.0662205650399 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100349350244 0.162205337803 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396363571617 0.0443174109184 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 63.6247240618 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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