Some people argue that young people should concentrate on study or work, some people think it is better to put energy in activities designed to broaden their experience, such as international travel and volunteering. Support with examples or cases.
Some people are arguing that teenagers should focus on their study or work while the others believe that they should take a gap year on traveling and volunteering to expand their life experience. Personally, I totally agree that the advantage of taking a drop year is outweigh the disadvantage and I will elaborate the reasons in the following paragraph.
Traveling abroad provides a chance for young people to meet a range of different people and knowing their cultures. while spending time in the outer of country, students can develop an understanding of other cultures better. For instance, I have been to the United States and Australia for a long stay, and I learned the lifestyle of Australians is healthier than that of the Americans. Additionally, there are some people that I met during that period became my lifelong friends. This is the thing that you cannot get from other resources.
Moreover, doing voluntary jobs also develop plenty of skills and identify the meaning of their life. Volunteering is a platform the meet people from all walks of life and doing the worthwhile thing together. They can learn skills from different careers of people to tackle challenges as well as to gain critical thinkings. Furthermore, it is a period of life that young people starting to identify themselves. While spending time with different people, they can refer to their experiences and get a clear picture of their expecting future.
To sum up, students can meet a number of different people so that they are able to know their cultures deeper. Also, volunteering help them to find out their future goal and learn plenty of skills which can apply in their life. So schools and parents should encourage their children to take a gap year for these advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
... the advantage of taking a drop year is outweigh the disadvantage and I will elaborate t...
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Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...rent people and knowing their cultures. while spending time in the outer of country, ...
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Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'help them find' instead.
Suggestion: help them find
...eir cultures deeper. Also, volunteering help them to find out their future goal and learn plenty ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 8.36945812808 131% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 20.9802955665 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.75862068966 35% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1207.87684729 123% => OK
No of words: 296.0 242.827586207 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00675675676 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7058090257 2.71678728327 100% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 139.433497537 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527027027027 0.580463131201 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 379.143842365 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6551724138 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4318088028 50.4703680194 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8 104.977214359 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.9669160288 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 7.25397266985 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259381242725 0.242375264174 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089354010262 0.0925447433944 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934237389734 0.071462118173 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167051818 0.151781067708 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508428157253 0.0609392437508 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 12.6369458128 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.1260098522 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.9458128079 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 11.5310837438 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32886699507 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 55.0591133005 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 82.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 74.5 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.