28)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion
Nowadays, technological development in the field of media have changed the world and the way to spread the different kinds of news. Especially these medias always target to public figures and celebrities personal lives. I agree the above statement. Media people should cover limited news about celebrities personal life.
First of all, television and other media's like online websites play back to back news about celebrities and public figures. The news may be good or bad, but they won't stop at-least for week. This effects ones personal life, especially to children. Almost all Television channels have a exclusive shows for celebrities gossips. And people are very curious to know about their favorite celebrities personal life. For example, many people crazily follow their favorite celebrities lifestyle, the way they dress, talk, walk and lot more. Some people worship them as god. Television and other media make people to watch back to back news of celebrities.
In addition, sometimes these medias show useful programs of public figures and celebrities that people enjoy watching it. Like sports players, famous scientists, business people and many more. It is good to follow positive things from your favorite public figures and celebrities. Children are very quickly manipulated by media news whether its good or bad news. And children very easily adapt their favorite hero or heroin's behavior. For instance, a actor died by consuming drugs and the media published as if, the actor did a great achievement. Media should really concentrate on which news is bad and good. And stop telecasting bad news over and over.
Furthermore, all types of medias show the news for almost a week or 10 days to increase there T.R.P (television rating point). And sometimes these news effects even the financial market like stock exchange. For example, in my country a popular business ambassador acquired a big company and the stock prices went up, people started selling their stocks. So media's news is very powerful and effective.
In short, media should concentrate on their limits of telecasting news. Publish more on useful programs. And stop repeating things.
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