Integrated essay " primordial soup "
Reading states that experiment by miller and urey makes us to know the life of origin and this become inspiration for large number of further investigations. But lecture opposes some points in the passage.
First one is while doing experiment, miller used continuous electrical charges to flask but infact early atmosphere also subjected to many electrical changes frequently but not continuously. And few weeks after changes they found amino acids in the experiment and these are able to survive in all conditions and these are basic structures of organisms. But according to the lecture, amino acids are already present in asteroids before the early atmosphere formed. But life formation not occured at that time.
So, this experiment not properly explains how the first cell is formed and how that cell reorganized to form another structures.
By raising these points professor argues with the points in the reading
Sentence: So, this experiment not properly explains how the first cell is formed and how that cell reorganized to form another structures.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and structures
Sentence: Reading states that experiment by miller and urey makes us to know the life of origin and this become inspiration for large number of further investigations.
Error: urey Suggestion: ?
Sentence: First one is while doing experiment, miller used continuous electrical charges to flask but infact early atmosphere also subjected to many electrical changes frequently but not continuously.
Error: infact Suggestion: in fact
Sentence: But life formation not occured at that time.
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 147 250
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Not on the right format.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need to reiterate the contents of reading passages in the introduction paragraph.
Don't need a conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 147 250
No. of Characters: 759 1200
No. of Different Words: 94 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.482 4.3
Average Word Length: 5.163 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.67 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 55 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 41 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.825 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.668 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.018 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4