It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built
in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Many people think that building a new movie theater is a bad idea. However, in my opinion building a movie theater would be a great idea. It would provide great opportunity for entertainment, more convenient for the residence of neighborhood and also bring job in our area.
First, movie theater would bring source of entertainment. Right now, there is little to do in our town. There is almost nowhere to go in evening and on weekends, the most nearest place that has movie theaters and restaurants is thirty minute away. If we would have movie theater in our town then we can go there in evening or on weekends.
Second, a movie theater would save our time and money. When we would have a movie theater in our neighborhood we can go there by walk which would save money for bus fair. Also it would save our time otherwise we have to travel thirty minute to watch a movie.
Third, It would bring more business in our town, it would increases job opportunity for residents of this town. People who come from different town to use movie theater in our town would also shop from our stores. Building a movie theater also provide job to our resident of town when building would build also give opportunity to work in theater after it would compilte.
I believe our town would benefit greatly from a new theater. It would make life here more interesting and more prosperous. I fully support this plan and hope that other in the neighborhood will also join me to convince the resident and local government.
Sentence: Third, It would bring more business in our town, it would increases job opportunity for residents of this town.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to would and increases
Sentence: Building a movie theater also provide job to our resident of town when building would build also give opportunity to work in theater after it would compilte.
Error: compilte Suggestion: complete
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The structure of the essay is ok. You need to put more words at essay body.
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