It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be builtin your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built
in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

“A new restaurant will be built in mu community”, it’s a new announced which I read it this morning. I stand thinking for a while, what will happen later if this restaurant is build. Some people reject this idea completely and other supports it. Building a new restaurant in my neighborhood has both negative and positive effects. Despite, I am one who adores food in all its form, but I am with a people whom reject the idea of building the restaurant in my community.

First of all, opening a new restaurant in our neighborhood will bring many problems to the community. One of these problem is noisy, either noise of machine during construction stage or the noise of traffic and people at opening stage. One of the important rights of the people is living in claim environment. During the construction stage, the machine is working night and day to finish the building of restaurant without keeping into consideration the comfort of surrounding people, in addition to excavations which is very dangerous for children whom play outside. At the stage of opening restaurant, many people will visit it to try a new type of food so they will produce a big noise which restricts the comfortable of the neighbors.

Second, another problem is congestion, due to many cars that visit this restaurant. So the neighbor will find a problem to park his car and he has to wait for several hours until the person finish his meal in the restaurant and remove his car, to park his car on that space. It’s big problem for the surrounding people whom want to go to their work or dates, they will be late due to this congestion. If the time to arrive to any place was 10 min, it will take half hour to reach the required place.

However, some people believe that building a new restaurant in the community will bring many benefits to them. First of all, it increases the opportunity of job, because any new place required a worker. Second, they provide them with a delicious meal and enjoying their time hanging with the friends. I can’t deny the advantages of building this restaurant but we must think about the black side of it.

To sum up, building a new restaurant in our community may be a good thing with respect to some people, but with respect of me the negative side of constructed this restaurant is more than it’s positive, that’s why I strongly disagree this idea.

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Sentence: I stand thinking for a while, what will happen later if this restaurant is build.
Description: The fragment is build . is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace build with verb, past participle

Sentence: Despite, I am one who adores food in all its form, but I am with a people whom reject the idea of building the restaurant in my community.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a comma
Suggestion: Refer to Despite and ,

Sentence: So the neighbor will find a problem to park his car and he has to wait for several hours until the person finish his meal in the restaurant and remove his car, to park his car on that space.
Description: The fragment person finish his is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace finish with verb, past tense

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